Homework Help: English

Posted by M on Thursday, January 24, 2013 at 9:26pm.

I must improve the organization of these four sentences of a paragraph in the most effective way. Is my answer correct?

Sentences:
1. The reader has probably figured out that the boy named Walter was Walter Elias Disney.
2. During his lifetime Disney and his staff created 18 animated feature-length films and won 48 Academny Awards.
3. With a steadfast determination to reach his goals and a desire to share his appreciation of animals, Walt Disney enriched the lives of millions of people around the world.
4. He also produced television shows, such as Disney's Wonderful World of Color and The Mickey Mouse Club, and founded California's Disneyland.

My answer: I am changing the order of the sentences to: 1, 2, 4, then 3. Is my order correct?

English - Ms. Sue, Thursday, January 24, 2013 at 9:33pm
Looks good, especially with your revised order.

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