Posted by Ana on Saturday, January 12, 2013 at 12:06pm.
The energy to the house I live in has had an adverse affect on ____. The apparatus does not get enough sunlight to generate electricity to all the appliances to the house for the night.
This is rather vague. What is "the apparatus"?
Read the italicized sentences (it's not a full paragraph, by the way) carefully to find the corrections I made.
Add details to make it a true paragraph. Re-post when you're ready.
The energy we get to heat up our house and run our appliances. Is a solar panel and is a necessity to live an everyday life. Do to a adverse affect on the solar panel caused by to much snow. The apparatus does not get enough sunlight to generate electricity. That the house needs to power all of the appliances and heat we need.
You have fragments and all sorts of other errors in what you have written. Did you look at what I corrected? That should get you started.
the energy we get to heat up the house and run our appliances is a energy solar panel.And it has an adverse affect on it do to the heavy snow fall.The apparatus does not generate enough energy do to lack of sunlight. And we need that energy to power our house for heat hot water food ext. It,s a necessity to live our every day lives.
Did i rewrite my paragraph right.Also thank you for your help
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