Homework Help: English

Posted by Ted on Wednesday, December 19, 2012 at 10:34pm.

I have difficulty restating my thesis in a different way in my conclusion.
my thesis: Ruby's sense of responsibility becomes her weaknesses as it makes her blind to the fact that her decision to stay with a man that maltreats her is wrong. For this, she develops a habit of smoking which leads to her downfall.
i have tried to restate this thesis but it didn't work.
pls help.

English - Writeacher, Thursday, December 20, 2012 at 7:37am
Well, first off, I don't think that's a thesis statement. It's all factual (what happened in the story, right?), with no insight or opinion of your own.

Read up on thesis statements and conclusions:

http://leo.stcloudstate.edu/acadwrite/thesistatement.html

http://leo.stcloudstate.edu/acadwrite/conclude.html

http://blog.eduify.com/index.php/2009/06/21/5-tips-on-how-to-write-a-strong-thesis-statement/

Try again.

http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/composition/endings.htm

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