I have an essay due Sunday, so could someone read my writing? If there are any unclear points, please ask questions for clarity. You may also point out spelling/grammar errors, but please to not tell me what to rewrite to fix the errors. Thanks!
Throughout Sophocles' tragedy Oedipus the King, significant moments reveal Oedipus' pride and praxis through his reactions toward the other characters in the play. For example, Oedipus tells Tiresias that “I have stood enough. Leave me. Go back whither you came" (34). By ordering Tiresias to leave, Oedipus’ excessive pride enables him to believe the impossible: changing his own fate. His anger, fueled by his pride, blinds him from the truth since he forces Tiresias out before he tells him. In addition, Oedipus' questions the shepherd threatening him that "if you won't speak of your own free will, we must use ways to make you speak" (69). Once again, Oedipus' pride converts to violence as he forces information about his past from everyone around him. By ignoring Jocasta's pleas to stop searching for the horrible truth, he does not act as role model for his subjects, not trusting his own wife. Lastly, Oedipus' flaws take a toll on him when he finds out the truth, saying that "All [is] out. Oozed out, to the last drop. There's a sort of joy in it. No more. No more to—Oh, what sin. Oh what unspeakable—what filth. To see this in a mirror" (72). Oedipus' persistence to finding the truth leads to his peripetia, where his dignity as king turns to fragility when he chooses to blind himself for his crime. Hearing what the shepherd has told him, Oedipus finally opens his eyes to his flaws. In summary, the play Oedipus the King contains significant moments revealing Oedipus’ pride and praxis, which teaches readers that possessing those characteristics lead to harmful relationships with others.
This is supposed to be one paragraph with three chunks.
You haven't addressed the other points I made in last night's reply to you.
Where are the unclear points of pronouns?
His anger, fueled by his pride, blinds him from the truth since he forces Tiresias out before he tells him.
Clarify the personal pronouns in this sentence, for example ... and make sure this fuzziness doesn't show up elsewhere, too.
Which he/him refers to Oedipus?
Which he/him refers to Tiresias?
and ... "before he tells him" what?
Re-post when you've revised it all.
This is what I could fix:
Throughout Sophocles' tragedy Oedipus the King, significant moments reveal Oedipus' pride and praxis through his reactions toward the other characters in the play. For example, Oedipus tells Tiresias that “I have stood enough. Leave me. Go back whither you came" (34). Oedipus’ anger, fueled by his pride, blinds himself from the truth since he thinks that he, a king, cannot do such crimes. By ordering Tiresias to leave, Oedipus’ excessive pride enables him to believe the impossible: changing his own fate. In addition, Oedipus' questions the shepherd threatening him that "if you won't speak of your own free will, we must use ways to make you speak" (69). Once again, Oedipus' pride converts to violence as he forces information about his past from everyone around him. By ignoring Jocasta's pleas to stop searching for the horrible truth, Oedipus does not act as role model for his subjects, not even trusting his own wife. Lastly, Oedipus' flaws take a toll on him when he finds out the truth, saying that "All [is] out. Oozed out, to the last drop. There's a sort of joy in it. No more. No more to—Oh, what sin. Oh what unspeakable—what filth. To see this in a mirror" (72). Oedipus' persistence to finding the truth leads to his peripetia, where his dignity as king turns to fragility when he chooses to blind himself for his crime. Hearing what the shepherd has told him, Oedipus finally opens his eyes to his flaws. In summary, the play Oedipus the King contains significant moments revealing Oedipus’ pride and praxis, which teaches readers that possessing those characteristics lead to harmful relationships with others.
English - Writeacher, Friday, December 7, 2012 at 11:14pm
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Remove "that" just before quoted lines, and use proper punctuation before each quotation. <~~???
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Should I remove all the "that"s? And should I have a comma before each quotation?
Yes, to both questions!
Ok, is there anything else I can do?
No, other than those things, it reads fine.
=)