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Be Yourself
“To be yourself in a world that is constantly trying to make you something else is the greatest accomplishment.” In the stories, “Not Poor, Just Broke,” by Gregory, “Salvation,” by Langston Hughes, and artwork by Laurie Cooper both have many common alikeness and differences. These stories and artwork portrayed alikeness of summaries, theme, and perceptiveness of cultural background.
In the story, “Not Poor, Just Broke, Langston Hughes was very specific in his writing. A boy was shameful of who he was. The theme is, “Don’t try to change yourself.” The story perspective on cultural background is that the boy is seven years old, young, not religious.
“Salvation,” by Langston Hughes is similar to the piece by Gregory by many things. Langston explained how his aunt said when he gets saved, he wants to see Jesus. However, he waited to see Jesus in the church while other kids got saved, but one boy said God’s name in vain and still got saved. So Langston thought since he waited so long, he should lie and say Jesus came, and get saved. He felt bad and thought since Jesus didn’t come, there wasn’t one. The theme is, “Lie’s don’t change you.” Langston was 13 years old and went to church compared to the boy in, “Not Poor, Just Broke.”
The artwork, “Face Reality,” by Laurie Cooper is alike to both stories. The piece depicts a woman face peeling and she has a dark skin complexion and white mask. “It’s not what on the outside; it’s what’s on the inside.” This artwork shows a woman wanting to show the real her, and not to hide behind a mask.
All in all, both the stories and artwork were alike, yet different. They all had character’s that wanted to change instead of showing the real them. What do you think?
Sure, I'd be happy to proofread your essay. Here are some suggested edits:
Title: Be Yourself
“To be yourself in a world that is constantly trying to make you something else is the greatest accomplishment.” In the stories, "Not Poor, Just Broke" by Gregory, "Salvation" by Langston Hughes, and artwork by Laurie Cooper, there are many commonalities and differences. These stories and artwork portray similarities in terms of summaries, themes, and the portrayal of cultural backgrounds.
In the story "Not Poor, Just Broke," Langston Hughes is very specific in his writing. The protagonist is ashamed of who he is. The theme of the story is "Don't try to change yourself." The story's perspective on cultural background is that the protagonist is a seven-year-old, young, and not religious.
"Salvation" by Langston Hughes is similar to the piece by Gregory in many ways. Langston explains how his aunt told him that when he gets saved, he will see Jesus. However, he waits to see Jesus in the church while other kids get saved. One boy even says God's name in vain and still gets saved. So Langston decides to lie and say Jesus came, and gets saved. He feels bad because he realizes that since Jesus didn't come, there must not be one. The theme of the story is "Lies don't change you." Langston is thirteen years old and goes to church, as compared to the boy in "Not Poor, Just Broke."
The artwork "Face Reality" by Laurie Cooper is similar to both stories. The piece depicts a woman's face peeling, with a dark skin complexion and a white mask. It symbolizes the idea that "it's not what's on the outside; it's what's on the inside that matters." This artwork shows a woman who wants to show her true self and not hide behind a mask.
In conclusion, both the stories and artwork share similarities and differences. They all involve characters who want to change themselves instead of embracing their true selves. What do you think?
Overall, your essay has a clear structure and effectively discusses the commonalities and differences in the stories and artwork. There were just a few minor issues with grammar, punctuation, and sentence structure that I have addressed. Good job!
Certainly! I'd be happy to proofread your essay and provide feedback. Here are a few suggestions to improve the flow and clarity of your writing:
1. Start with a clear and engaging introduction: Instead of beginning with the quote, consider starting with a concise summary of the commonalities among the stories and artwork. Then, you can introduce the quote as a powerful statement that supports your thesis.
2. Provide more context and analysis: For each story and artwork, try to provide more specific details and analysis to support your claims. Rather than simply stating that they have commonalities in summaries, theme, and cultural background, explain how these similarities manifest in each piece. Describe specific scenes, characters, or themes that are shared or similar.
3. Elaborate on the significance of the shared themes: Instead of just stating the themes, delve deeper into what they mean and why they are important in the context of each story or artwork. Expand on how these themes contribute to the overall message or impact of the piece.
4. Proofread for grammar and punctuation: Be mindful of punctuation errors, such as missing commas after introductory phrases or inconsistent capitalization in titles. Also, check for any spelling or grammar mistakes that may have slipped through.
5. Conclude with a strong closing statement: Rather than ending with a question, consider summarizing the main points of your essay and tying them back to the quote that you opened with. This will provide a more satisfying and conclusive ending to your essay.
Remember, these are just general suggestions. It's essential to tailor your revisions to your specific writing style and the requirements of your assignment. Good luck with your essay!