Critique my thesis please?
Sartre uses the ideas he lays out in “Self-Deception” in his short story “The Wall” to establish the connection between bad faith and living toward death, and to reject the Freudian notion of the unconscious in favor of the idea that individuals have complete conscious access to the genesis of and reasons for all actions, though they may choose to ignore this knowledge.
WAAAAAAYYYY too long!
What's the central idea you want to convince others of?
http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/composition/thesis.htm
http://leo.stcloudstate.edu/acadwrite/thesistatement.html
These are two of the very best places I've seen online to help students write good thesis statements. The second one shows you sentences that aren't thesis statements and how to turn each one into a real thesis statement.
Thank you!
You're welcome.
Once you have your thesis statement pared down to the central idea, please feel free to re-post if you want one of us to check it for you.
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To critique your thesis, I will break it down into its key components and evaluate each one individually:
1. Sartre uses the ideas he lays out in "Self-Deception" in his short story "The Wall" to establish the connection between bad faith and living toward death.
- This component of the thesis statement is clear and specific. It addresses Sartre's use of ideas from "Self-Deception" to explore the connection between bad faith and living toward death in "The Wall."
2. Sartre rejects the Freudian notion of the unconscious in favor of the idea that individuals have complete conscious access to the genesis of and reasons for all actions, though they may choose to ignore this knowledge.
- This component of the thesis statement also appears to be clear. It highlights Sartre's rejection of the Freudian concept of the unconscious in favor of the belief that individuals have conscious access to the reasons behind their actions, even if they choose to ignore or deny this awareness.
Overall, your thesis statement effectively communicates the main points you intend to discuss in your analysis. However, to provide a more comprehensive critique, it would be beneficial to have more context regarding your argument and evidence to support these claims. Additionally, it may be helpful to include a sentence that provides an overarching claim or argument that ties together the two components of your thesis statement.