Homework Help: composition&communication

Posted by Katelynn on Sunday, October 28, 2012 at 3:33pm.

I have to make a thesis statement for my essay I have made one but it's not good enough. It has to be 25 words or less and be about flat irons and curling irons including my bias and four points i'll be compare and contrasting them on. My teacher gave me one to use and make my own but it's more than 25 words so I can't use it. Please help?

I have- Although curling irons are great flat irons offer more, they’ll both be analyzed on their style options, tips and results, completion time, and damage affects.

My teacher suggested- Although flat irons and curling irons appear to be very similar, a closer look at style options etc. reveal that the flat iron is actually a more effective hair care product.

composition&communication - Ms. Sue, Sunday, October 28, 2012 at 3:47pm
Your teacher's thesis is good, but too wordy.

Although flat irons and curling irons seem similar, the flat iron is actually the more effective hair care product.
composition&communication - Katelynn, Sunday, October 28, 2012 at 3:55pm
Thank you for your help but I think I need to have the points I will be arguing about included or at least one of them and they are style options, damage effects, completion time, tips and results.
composition&communication - Ms. Sue, Sunday, October 28, 2012 at 4:10pm
Although flat irons and curling irons seem similar, the flat iron produces more style options and less damage to the hair.
composition&communication - Katelynn, Sunday, October 28, 2012 at 4:14pm
Thank you I actually came up with the same thing, I found a thesis generator online and used it.
composition&communication - Ms. Sue, Sunday, October 28, 2012 at 4:16pm
You're welcome.

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