I have this assignment for my Social Studies class about the National Convention. Well most of you know about the National Convention thing since you watch Republicans or Democratic. The essay is focusing on First Lady Michelle Obama and Ann Romney. They gave speeches at their husbands' respective national convention.

This is the info. that I got from the assignment handout my teacher hand out:

National Convention Speeches
You task is to write an essay in which you will critically analyze both speeches and reflect upon the message, tone, mood, and context. In you essay answer the questions, such as
1. How did one speech compare to the other?
2. According to First Lady Michelle Obama's speech, what can you infer her husband's view of America and the role of the president
3. According to Ann Romney's speech, what can you infer her husband's view of America and the role of the president
4. What did you like about each speech? What do you believe could have made the speeches better? Did you have any issues with either of their message? What surprised you? What questions arose as you listened to each speech?

National Convention Speeches Essay Format
(Paragraph 2 and 3) Focus on Ann Romney: In these paragraphs please discuss you overall view (positive and negative) about the speeches; audience reception; possible implications of gender roles; and what one could infer about their spouse's view of America.
(Paragraph 4 and 5) Focus on First Lady Michelle Obama: In these paragraphs please discuss you overall view (positive and negative) about the speeches; audience reception; possible implications of gender roles; and what one could infer about their spouse's view of America.
(Paragraph 6, 7, and 8) Critically compare and analyze each speech. Also, include you answer to some or all of the questions. You can also focus on the questions that arose as you watched both speeches. Also, include you answer to some or all of the questions
(Paragraph 9 and 10) Conclusion: Recap and Summarize you views and highlight the greater implication (meaning) for the American people, and global society.

I have to use sophisticated vocabulary words.

Please let me know if there any grammar errors, any good vocab. words you suggest to make my essay better, and important of all IS IT GOOD?

This worth 20% of my grade and this is my first writing assignment since the beginning of the school year. I already watch the speeches in class last week.


BTW --- There are 11 paragraphs in my essay (this is how much my teacher wants it but she did the intro. for me and the class)

I REALLY want to get a good grade (mostly a 100) in this writing assignment.

PS --- I'm almost done with this essay so I'm going to post it in a few minutes

Please, please, proofread your essay very carefully before you post it.

I know, I am anyway.

Just a comment: "I have to use sophisticated vocabulary words" . My thought is you ought to express yourself with words you know. The most powerful language a writer can use is that which conveys the strongest, direct meaning the author meant, full of emotion, flame, and power. You may want to read the Gettysburg address. Many were critical he did not use sophisticated words, nor made it long.

And, of course, considerd one of my favorite plain language poems: http://niv.scripturetext.com/psalms/23.htm
I know, your teacher wants it anyway. But try to use those words you know.

She said or others that I beliebe may be relevant to the essay :)

It's great to hear that you're almost done with your essay! Here are some suggestions and tips to help improve your essay and increase your chances of getting a good grade:

1. Grammar Errors: It would be helpful if you post your essay here for me to review the document. However, make sure to proofread your writing carefully to correct any grammar errors, such as punctuation, capitalization, subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure.

2. Vocabulary: To make your essay more sophisticated, you can incorporate advanced vocabulary words. Instead of using common words, try to use more specific and precise language. For example, instead of saying "good," you can use words like "commendable" or "admirable." You can also consult a thesaurus to find synonyms that fit the context of your essay.

3. Overall View: In your analysis of each speech, ensure that you provide a well-rounded perspective by discussing both positive and negative aspects. This shows that you've critically considered both speeches and aren't biased towards one side. Focus on the content, delivery, and effectiveness of their messages.

4. Audience Reception: Consider analyzing how the speeches were received by the audience. Did they seem engaged, enthusiastic, or moved? Did they react positively or negatively to specific points made by the speakers? This shows that you're thinking about the impact of the speeches on the intended audience.

5. Gender Roles: In discussing the implications of gender roles, consider how Ann Romney's and Michelle Obama's speeches fit into societal expectations and perceived roles for women. Discuss any potential influences or effects their gender may have had on their speeches and the way they were perceived by the public.

6. Inferences: Consider the messages conveyed in each speech and what they suggest about their husband's view of America and the role of the president. Use direct quotes or specific examples from the speeches to support your inferences.

7. Analysis and Comparison: In your paragraphs that critically compare and analyze each speech, make sure to address the specific questions given in your assignment handout. Also, discuss any questions that arose as you watched both speeches, and try to provide thoughtful insights and answers to those questions.

8. Conclusion: Your conclusion should summarize your views and key points from the essay. It's important to highlight the greater implications or meaning for the American people and global society. Consider adding your personal thoughts on the significance of the speeches in the broader context of political discourse and the impact on society.

Remember to structure your essay in a logical manner, with coherent paragraphs that flow smoothly. Review your essay for clarity, coherence, and organization.

Lastly, note that the ultimate quality of your essay will depend on your thoughtful analysis and coherent argumentation. Good luck, and I hope you achieve the grade you desire!