Posted by Hannah on Tuesday, August 14, 2012 at 8:58am.
I'd use a colon to introduce the "list" of ideas and then use semicolons to separate the items in the list.
It may take a large amount of persistence, but the result is most often the same: work hard and life will be fruitful; hold on to every goal you embrace; reach those goals; and the rest will be history.
I think the underlined part is wordy and not straightforward. That section can be revised to become one section of your list.
In addition, be sure to study up on the uses of commas, colons, and semicolons:
http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/commas.htm
http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/marks/colon.htm
http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/marks/semicolon.htm
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