I am trying to come up with a thesis for my english paper. It is going to be on Social class in Katherine Mansfields The Garden Party and A Cup of Tea. I want to show how both the upper class main characters take particular interest in the lower class characters. I came up with the one below if you could think of anymore that better relates to what I'm trying to do that would be very helpful.

Potential Thesis: In Katherine Mansfield’s short stories The Garden Party and A Cup of Tea, she uses the upper classes disillusionment of reality to show the rigid social structure beneath.

Also the upper class romanticises the lower class and lives in a "fake" reality

Which thesis are you going to concentrate on?

What do you mean? The last thing I added was just a note on what the social class during the 1900's (when the short stories were set) in Europe was like.

OK. See my later response.

Your proposed thesis is a good start, as it identifies the key elements you want to explore in your paper. However, if you are specifically focusing on how the upper-class main characters take an interest in the lower-class characters, you may want to revise your thesis to highlight this aspect more directly. Here's an alternative thesis statement that puts more emphasis on this aspect:

Revised Thesis: Katherine Mansfield's short stories, The Garden Party and A Cup of Tea, portray the fascination of the upper-class main characters with the lower class, revealing the complex dynamics and interplay between social classes.

This revised thesis statement explicitly states your intention to explore how the upper-class characters in Mansfield's stories show a particular interest in the lower-class characters. It also highlights that you will analyze the complex dynamics and interplay between different social classes.

Remember, thesis statements can evolve and change as you delve deeper into your research and analysis. It's important to keep refining and adjusting your thesis statement as you gain a deeper understanding of the texts and concepts you are exploring.