Hello I have a job interview question I want to get right.
Below is the note I composed. How does it sound?
Dear Mr. Smith
Thank you for your interest in Apt. 1107, I am glad the apartment met your criteria.
If you have any other questions please feel free to give me a call. I will be happy to assist you.
It was great meeting you and I hope you choose our apatments as your new home.
Also I am posting the guidelines
You’ve recently completed a tour and now it’s time to write the customer a ‘Thank you’ note.
Here’s the customer information:
• Name - Joe Smith
• Tour - Conducted in Apt. 1107 with a 2-bed 2-bath
• Interests - Pool, 24-hour fitness center, second bedroom that can function as an office
• Tour Ended With - Joe was very interested, but wanted to ‘sleep on it’ before making a commitment.
Compose a 'Thank you' note in the provided area. Please take your time completing this answer, as this information will be shared when presenting your information to hiring managers
English/Marketing - Writeacher, Monday, June 4, 2012 at 4:01pm
Check for these things:
comma splice - http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/runons.htm#splice
You wrote, "If you have any other questions..." -- what was his first question??
You wrote, "I hope you choose our apatments ... " -- spelling; also is he thinking of renting more than one apartment?