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Do you think the following is a weak or strong thesis statement: “The subject of this paper is my experience with teaching elementary school children”? If yes, why is it weak? How could you improve it? If no, what qualities do you think it has that make it adequate?
Yes, it's weak!!
First read this: http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/intros.htm
Then re-think it. Your thesis statement must include factual information (which you already have) plus your position/opinion/stance. Without your position on the topic, it isn't a true thesis statement. So think of this sentence as the angle you want to take on the topic and what you intend to prove by the end of your paper. (If your statement is simply factual, then there's nothing to prove!)
Read carefully and follow ALL directions.
This is one of the very best places I've seen online to help students write good thesis statements. It shows you sentences that aren't thesis statements and how to turn each one into real thesis statements.