Revise sentence for better understanding/communication
1.Business has an inordinate influence on governmental operations.
2. Our expectaions are that there will be increasement in commodity value.
3. Can we assertain the types of customers that have a predisposition to utilize our instant- credit offer?
4. the preponderance of the business people we consulted envision signs of improvement from the current siege of economics stagnation?
5. if liquidation becomes mandatory, we shall dispose of these assets first?
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1. Business heavily influences governmental operations.
To revise this sentence for better understanding/communication, you can rephrase it as "Business has a significant impact on how the government functions."
2. We anticipate that the value of commodities will increase.
To make this sentence clearer, you can say "We expect that the prices of commodities will rise."
3. Can we determine the types of customers who are more likely to use our instant-credit offer?
To improve the clarity of this sentence, you can ask "Can we identify the customer segments that are most inclined to utilize our instant-credit offer?"
4. Most of the business people we consulted believe that there will be signs of improvement from the current economic stagnation.
To make this sentence easier to understand, you can rephrase it as "The majority of the business people we consulted are optimistic that the current economic stagnation will improve."
5. If we have to liquidate assets, should we prioritize disposing of these assets first?
To enhance the clarity of this sentence, you can ask "If we are required to liquidate assets, should we sell these assets first?"