DESCRIPTIVE WRITING
A song or piece of music comes to the radio. Immediately the tune reminds you of a particularly happy or sad occasion. Describe in detail the scene you remember (real or imaginary) and your feelings at that time:
It was my first day back from Lakewood girls boarding school. A tremendous feeling of happiness flooded over me as our ancient, unoiled banger of a car slowly crawled up the familiar driveway. Flinging open the squeaky car door, I spotted dad watering the withering plants at the far end of the garden.
''Daddy! Daddy!'' I screamed at the top of my lungs as I raced towards him. My heart was pounding against my ribs like a rubber mallet at the utter joy of setting eyes on my beloved father after what felt like decades.
He wore a pair of faded grey trousers, a large brimmed straw hat and a stripy purple shirt.As he slowly turned around I noted how he hadn't changed a bit since the last time I had seen him. Tall and handsome, his face was slightly sunburnt, his hazel brown eyes were as bright as the sun. He was certainly a father to be proud of.
But to my surprise , his round face had an expression of anger and rage on it. In fact, I thought to myself, he looked as furious and bad tempered as a raging bull who saw red. ''Get inside the house now!'' he hollered angrily. His words came down on me like a stabbing knife, wiping all the happiness from my heart.
''But da...'' breaking me off, he repeated his words in a more threatening tone. Feeling confused and downhearted, I slowly trudged up the winding path to the house. My whole life seemed to cave in, the confusion in my mind was whirling around like an angry tornado. I didn't notice the fresh air that brushed against my face or the sun like a burning beach ball in the sky. Nor did I admire the fragrant scent of the recently mowed grass and the tuneful singing of the bright red robins perched on their branches. I felt crestfallen, like a puppy with its tail between its legs.
As I reached the red bricked house with the miniature windows lining the walls, the mouthwatering smell of freshly baked cakes drifted out of the windows and wafted up my nostrils. I was just raising my shaking hand to press the bell when the little red front door burst open. From inside the sound of merry music came to my ears and there was a sudden union cry of ''Surprise!'' A whole crowd of my close friends and family rushed out of the house with dad in front. To my relief and joy his face was one big smile as he threw me high up into the air ''Do you like it? Are you surprised?'' Shouted excited voices from the huge crowd. But I couldn't answer, I was so gobsmacked. Before I knew it tears of happiness were streaming down my face and my throat seemed to get tied into a tight knot.
As the merry song on the radio came to an abrupt stop, my cherished memories of that glorious day also came to a happy ending..
Thanks for the help..
please mark my descriptive writing
You're welcome! It sounds like you have already written a detailed and vivid description of the scene and your feelings at that time. You've described the setting, the characters, and the emotions you experienced. It's great to see how the music on the radio triggered such a powerful memory for you.
In case you need any specific help with descriptive writing in the future, here are a few tips:
1. Use sensory details: Include descriptions that engage the senses, such as sight, sound, taste, touch, and smell. This helps the reader envision and experience the scene more vividly.
2. Show, don't tell: Instead of just stating your feelings, paint a picture with your words that allows the reader to feel those emotions themselves. Use descriptive language, metaphors, and similes to convey the intensity of your emotions.
3. Create a clear structure: Organize your description in a logical order, so the reader can follow along easily. Start with an engaging introduction, provide specific details in the body paragraphs, and end with a satisfying conclusion.
4. Revise and edit: After writing your description, read it aloud or have someone else read it to check for clarity, coherence, and grammar mistakes. Make sure your writing flows smoothly and effectively communicates the intended emotions.
Overall, descriptive writing is all about bringing your memories and experiences to life on the page. Keep practicing and experimenting with different techniques to develop your skills. Good luck with your writing!