posted by Henry2 on .
Here is the criticism on the novel I need to improve
1) The story is told by a first-person narrator and is thus a faked autobiography. To enhance realism to the story (to reinforce the idea of realism), Defoe supplies many facts about Robinson (is is appropriate to use "supply"?): his name and surname, what part of England he comes from, who his parents and relatives are, and so on. (I'd like to rephrase this sentence and reduce it).
2) The places Robinson visits are descibed in great detail and set in their geographical context (synonym?)
3) Time is accounted for in the most precise manner.
4) Robinson appears to us (?) as the representative of the early 18-century Englishmen who in those years were colonizing the world thus laying the foundations of Britain's commercial empire in countries as far away as Canada and India. (I think it is too wordy).
1) The story is told in the first person so it seems like an autobiography. To ensure realism in the story, Defoe supplies many facts about Robinson: his names, origin, family members, and so on.
2) The places Robinson visits are descibed in great detail for accuracy in the setting.
4) Robinson appears to be the epitome of an early 18th century Englishman, who in those years would have been colonizing the world, thus laying the foundations of Britain's empire far-flung places, such as Canada and India.