Writing sentences and paragraphs. Is the below correct?

Paragraphs 1

Dear Mrs. Peggy,
I am so glad that I enroll in Penn Foster School for my new career. I wanted to better my education by taking medical billing and coding to help me get a better paying job. You were asking me about going to school. I think that by taking classes through Penn Foster would also give you the great opportunely to better you education knowledge by enrolling in this field through Penn Foster School. Penn Foster gives you the greatest opportunely to work at your own pace in your spare time, they are available to help you if there are any questions or concerns that you may have. And if you happen to fail this test don’t get discourage you will be able to retake it over. But when you retake the test over the highest score you can make is 70.

Dear Mrs. Peggy,

I am so glad that I enrolled in Penn Foster School to study for my new career. I want to improve my education by taking medical billing and coding to help me get a better paying job. You asked me about going to school. I think that taking classes through Penn Foster would give you a great opportunity to further your education. Penn Foster gives you the greatest opportunity to work at your own pace in your spare time. They are available to help you if you have questions or concerns. If you happen to fail this test don’t get discouraged. You will be able to retake it. However when you retake the test the highest score you can make is 70.

glad that I enrolled

to better your educational

spare time. It is available

if you happen to fail this test, don’t get discouraged; you will be able to retake it. But when you retake the test the highest score you can make is 70.

Paragraphs help organize your writing into distinct chunks of information. Each paragraph should focus on a specific idea or topic.

In your paragraph, it seems like you have a mix of thoughts and ideas that could be better organized into separate paragraphs. Here's a revised version with clear paragraph breaks:

Paragraph 1:
Dear Mrs. Peggy,
I am so glad that I enrolled in Penn Foster School for my new career. I wanted to better my education by taking medical billing and coding to help me get a better-paying job.

Paragraph 2:
You were asking me about going to school. I think that by taking classes through Penn Foster, it would also give you the great opportunity to improve your education and knowledge by enrolling in this field through Penn Foster School.

Paragraph 3:
Penn Foster gives you the greatest opportunity to work at your own pace in your spare time. They are available to help you if there are any questions or concerns that you may have. And if you happen to fail a test, don't get discouraged. You will be able to retake it. However, when you retake the test, the highest score you can make is 70.

By breaking down your paragraph into separate paragraphs, each with a clear topic, your writing becomes clearer and easier to read.