Posted by Ann on Friday, January 13, 2012 at 10:13am.
It's a compound-complex sentence, and it needs one comma added. Can you see where?
http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/sentences.htm#sentence_types
"...has a need to feel accepted and being cared about..."
This part needs to have parallel form. How will you fix it?
http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/parallelism.htm
would that be better: Everyone has a need to feel being accepted and cared about, and it is family and friends that play a vital role in individual’s lifestyle choices
It would be best to eliminate "being." Substitute "who" for "that."
Almost perfect!
Remove "being" in the first clause, and add "an" before "individual" in the second clause. Then everything will be fine.
so it would be this way: Everyone has a need to feel accepted and cared about, and it is family and friends that play a vital role in an individual’s lifestyle choices
Yes.
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