i writing paragraph on whether the first nations within canada be granted some form of self government with the regard to their economy, education, laws, and environment? i have to give evidence to back my claims.

i not sure if this good idea because if they have self government then they do whatever they want and that not fair for others. I think they should be granted their rights and maybe special privileges because they were once long ago deprived of the land they were entitled to by canadian government, so this good compensation. all people should have same rights like everyone else and white people not doing good by discriminating first nations. They be able to have equal oppurtunities like white people in country. their living conditions need improvement and if they obtain their rights this be good. without education, the first nations not be able to find good jobs and face hostility and discrimination. self government support them in this, but i think it may give them more than what they need, so that's why i just think they have few more rights than whites in order to protect their right to maintain their different identity.

any more ideas i put in here and this need to be edited? i not sure what paragraph structure need to be separated.

Your ideas are excellent! I agree with you.

If I edit this, your teacher may not believe this is your work. Please ask your teacher whether you should have someone else correct your English.

well i actually have this friend of mine and he before edit everything for me and teacher let him. but now he not in my class anymore and anyone else i not know so teacher say if anyone help me that fine. my parents not know english either.

i also add this little bit that first nations need same respect like whites and they not be forced to leave their homes at small age than canadians. their environment cant not be taken over canadian industries cause that lead to harm in frist nations traditional activities. they obtain their rights through changes in canadian charter. its the only way for them to obtain their rights to manage resources and gain control of their education, culture and justice systems.

I'm not sure if this a good idea because if the First Nations have self government then they can do whatever they want and that's not fair for others. I think they should be granted their rights and maybe special privileges because they were once deprived of their land by the Canadian government, so this is good compensation. All people should have the same rights as everyone else. White people are not doing good by discriminating against the First Nations. They should be able to have equal oppurtunities like white people in this country. Their living conditions need improvement and if they obtain their rights this will be good. Without education, the people of the First Nations will not be able to find good jobs and face hostility and discrimination. Self government support them in this, but i think it may give them more than what they need. That's why I just think they should have a few more rights than whites in order to protect their right to maintain their different identity.

The First Nations need the same respect as whites. They should not be forced to leave their homes at a younger age than Canadians. Their environment can't be taken over by Canadian industries because that will lead to harm of the First Nations' traditional activities. They can obtain their rights through changes in the Canadian charter. It's the only way for them to obtain their rights to manage resources and gain control of their education, culture and justice systems.

thank you very very much ms. sue :) have a good night :)

To improve the structure of your paragraph, I would suggest separating it into three distinct sections: an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. This will make it easier for the reader to follow your arguments and evidence.

Here's an example of how you could organize your paragraph:

Introduction:
Briefly introduce the topic and state your overall stance on whether First Nations within Canada should be granted some form of self-government.

Body Paragraph 1 - Economy, Education, and Laws:
Start by discussing the benefits of granting First Nations self-government in the areas of economy, education, and laws.
- Provide evidence to support your claims. For example, you could mention the success stories of Indigenous communities that have already achieved self-government and have seen improvements in economic development, educational outcomes, and legal autonomy.
- You could also highlight the importance of self-determination, which allows First Nations to design and implement policies that cater to their specific needs and cultural values.

Body Paragraph 2 - Environment:
Focus on the significance of self-government for the environment and natural resources.
- Explain how Indigenous peoples have a deep connection to the land and possess traditional ecological knowledge that can contribute to sustainable resource management.
- Provide examples of instances where First Nations' rights to land and resources were not adequately protected, leading to negative consequences for both the environment and Indigenous communities.

Conclusion:
Summarize your main points and reiterate your stance, making sure to emphasize the fair and just compensation that self-government represents.
- Acknowledge the concerns about potential inequality but stress the importance of providing all citizens with equal opportunities and rights.
- Mention the need for improved living conditions and access to education, highlighting how self-government can address these issues.

Remember to review and edit your paragraph for clarity, grammar, and punctuation. Additionally, consider expanding on each point with more specific evidence, examples, or expert opinions to provide a more comprehensive argument.