posted by jon on .
I'm writing an essay and to me my opening sentence could be worded better or is a run on. Please help.
Although it’s difficult to a chose a particular event or person that had the greatest impact on western civilization, the rule of Constantine the Great was a figure that stood out.
I meant choose* not chose by the way.
Although there are many events and people that have had great effects on western civilization, Constantine the Great was a figure who stands out.
1. Making the introductory clause positive rather than negative works better.
2. "the rule of Constantine" was not a figure.
Yeh that's why i said Constantine the Great, but what do you mean by your first statement. How would I change the sentence then?
Please reread what I posted. I changed your sentence.
Sorry I'm half asleep, thanks.