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Homework Help: Grammar Check

Posted by HM on Monday, December 5, 2011 at 9:46am.


My teacher has said no "you or yous" in the whole of the essay.

So if I put "Keep Your Mind on the Road" as a title.. is it appropriate?
Should I put "Keep the Mind on the Road" instead?

Moreover, my friend says they are some grammar mistakes in my introductory paragraph..
I don't know what he is talking about.. can you direct me exactly where these mistakes are.

There are lucky days when a driver gets way with writing a text on a U-turn, or hearing a birthday carol from a loved one on their way to work. But not all drivers are fortunate. Ever since cell phones have existed, the numbers of fatal crashes have become directly proportional to the number of cell phone subscribers each year; whether for calling or texting cell phones are the most distracting object for a driver. While the latest hands-free phones are a safer option for some; mere visual attention is not enough. The inattention from using a cell phone causes the driver to be mentally impaired, which leads to improper driving, resulting in crashes. Consequently, distracted driving is lethal. The United States government should prohibit the use of cell phones while driving to provide more safety to the roads.

Also is my thesis and introductory paragraph good?

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