need help with my Juggling topic.I got 6/20 and I want to get the full 20 points! Thanks!Such as thesis, Introduction.
Thesis: The purpose of my speech is to inform my audience about my experience with juggling; more specifically how I became involved with juggling.
I have to break down my main points but I don't know other two to add as juggling experience. I have to have I, II & III...so far I have one which is "How I became involved with juggling."
Introduction: Have you ever indugled yourself in a hobby that captured your imagination, interests and kept you occupied? Well, I did. Juggling has been my passion, it provides me unique way to learn escape. Ever since, I was a little girl and lived in my native country; I loved juggling and juggled with different objects.
In there Introduction, I have to accomplish 3 purpose which are Motivation, Forecast and Orientation. Please, tell me how to include this in the intorduction..thanks!
English - Writeacher, Friday, December 2, 2011 at 1:23pm
How did your teacher score the 6/20? I can help you better if I know what he/she is looking for.
For example, I don't think you have written a true thesis statement, but without knowing what your teacher wants, I can't be sure.
English - Saahre, Friday, December 2, 2011 at 5:48pm
Ok, thanks! First she said that I did not have good thesis statement. For instance, I have to have 3 main points which i'll be giving speech about in my thesis. In the thesis statement so far I only have one which is "how I became involved with juggling."
Thesis: The purpose of my speech is to inform my audience about my experience with juggling; more specifically how I became involved with juggling. This is how she wants to be written except she wants me to include othe two experiences i had with juggling.
For instance.
I. I'll be talking about "How I became invloved with juggling.
II & III. I don't kow what to talk about and she wants to know what will i'll for those two which I need help with. I, II & III had to be stated in the thesis but I only have I so far.
What are some of the experince with juggling I should talk about besides how became involved with juggling?
Also, She said, I got the conclusion right but I don't have the 3 purpose which are Motivation, Forecast and Orientation. Please, tell me how to include this in the intorduction..thanks! What are these please. So much questions but I really need help, thanks!
Please post under the same name every time. I don't recognize "help" as someone's first name.
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Your thesis statement must include factual information (which you already have) plus your position/opinion/stance. Without your position on the topic, it isn't a true thesis statement. So think of this sentence as the angle you want to take on the topic and what you intend to prove by the end of your paper. (If your statement is simply factual, then there's nothing to prove!)
http://blog.eduify.com/index.php/2009/06/21/5-tips-on-how-to-write-a-strong-thesis-statement/
Read carefully and follow ALL directions.
http://leo.stcloudstate.edu/acadwrite/thesistatement.html
This is one of the very best places I've seen online to help students write good thesis statements. It shows you sentences that aren't thesis statements and how to turn each one into real thesis statements.
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You wrote: The purpose of my speech is to inform my audience about my experience with juggling; more specifically how I became involved with juggling.
Since I have no idea what you did or how you felt about juggling, I cannot add to this. Only you can do this. Ask yourself these questions: Who taught me? When? (how old was I?) How hard was it to learn? Where did I perform? What did I want to accomplish? Why did I want to learn this skill?
Be sure you read through the last linked webpage I gave you above -- especially the 5th example on that page. That corrected thesis statement has three elements in it which will be the three main points of the essay following. You need to set yours up like that, too.
To improve your juggling topic and increase your score, you can consider the following suggestions:
1. To expand on your thesis statement, "how I became involved with juggling," you need two additional experiences related to juggling. Think about moments or events that have shaped your juggling skills, challenged you, or helped you grow as a juggler. For example, you could talk about a difficult juggling routine you mastered or the first time you performed in front of an audience. These experiences will add depth and variety to your speech.
2. To include the three main points (I, II, and III) in your thesis statement, you can revise it as follows: "The purpose of my speech is to inform my audience about my experiences with juggling. I will discuss how I became involved with juggling (Point I), the challenges I faced and overcame as a juggler (Point II), and the impact that juggling has had on my personal growth and development (Point III)."
Now, let's discuss how to include the three purposes (Motivation, Forecast, and Orientation) in your introduction:
Motivation: Capture the audience's attention and generate interest in your topic. You can start with a captivating opening line, an intriguing fact or statistic about juggling, or a personal anecdote that highlights the excitement or benefits of juggling.
Forecast: Provide a brief overview of what you will be discussing in your speech. Clearly state the main points (I, II, and III) that you mentioned in your revised thesis statement. For example, you can say something like, "Today, I will take you on a journey through my juggling experiences. First, I will share how I became involved with juggling. Then, I will discuss the challenges I faced and overcame as a juggler, and finally, I will explore the profound impact that juggling has had on my personal growth and development."
Orientation: Give your audience a sense of the structure of your speech by indicating the order in which you will present your main points. For example, you can say, "We will start by exploring my journey into juggling, followed by an exploration of the challenges I faced and overcame, and finally, we will delve into the transformative effects juggling has had on my life."
By incorporating these elements into your revised thesis statement and introduction, you will provide a clear roadmap for your speech and engage your audience right from the beginning. Good luck with your presentation!