I really need you to consider this rephrase of Hamlet's monologue "To Be or not To Be" and help me check it.
I added a few more things and I'd like know your opinion. Thank you.
1)Hamlet wonders if it is better to bear the slings and arrows of outragous fortune, that is to obstain from action or to make a stand (fight) against his mass of troubles.
2) He can oppose his troubles either by committing suicide or by killing Claudius.
3) Two philosophical positions, which remain (?) unreconciled in Hamlet's monologue, are expressed in the first lines: one is the Stoic attitude of enduring life's evils and misfortune at all costs and to an end; the either is the belief that, man may end life by suicide (I think not only by suicide but by killing Claudius too!!).
4) The idea of death as a sleep, typical of the medieval perspective, is then countered by the doubt of the Renaissance man about what there may be beyond life (or the doubt of the Renaissance man concerning the life after death).
5) Actually, the Bible uses such images as "sleep in the dust" for death and the Burial Service refers (referred) to death as a sleep. Shakespeare's audience was perfectly familiar with such images.
It's not rephrasing when you use the unique wording of the original. For example, these words and phrases need to be rephrased:
"slings and arrows"
"outrageous fortune"
Use this for help if you need it: http://nfs.sparknotes.com/hamlet/page_138.html
Let's break down each point and provide some feedback:
1) Hamlet wonders if it is better to bear the slings and arrows of outrageous fortune, that is to abstain from action, or to make a stand (fight) against his mass of troubles.
This is a clear and concise rephrase of the original line from Hamlet's monologue. It accurately captures Hamlet's contemplation on whether it is better to passively endure the challenges life throws at him or actively confront them. Well done!
2) He can oppose his troubles either by committing suicide or by killing Claudius.
Your addition of considering killing Claudius alongside suicide is a valid point since it is one of the options Hamlet contemplates. However, it would be better to phrase it as "He can oppose his troubles either by taking his own life or seeking revenge by killing Claudius." This maintains the clarity and flow of the sentence. Good job bringing up this important aspect of the monologue!
3) Two philosophical positions, which remain (?) unreconciled in Hamlet's monologue, are expressed in the first lines: one is the Stoic attitude of enduring life's evils and misfortune at all costs and to an end; the other is the belief that man may end life by suicide (I think not only by suicide but by killing Claudius too!).
Your analysis of the contrasting philosophical positions in the monologue is accurate. However, regarding the phrase "which remain (?) unreconciled," it is more appropriate to use "are left unreconciled" or "are unresolved." Additionally, you correctly pointed out that the belief of ending life extends beyond suicide to include killing Claudius. To improve the sentence, I would suggest rephrasing it as follows: "The first lines of the monologue express two philosophical positions that are left unreconciled: one is the Stoic attitude of enduring life's evils and misfortune at all costs and to an end, while the other encompasses the belief that one can end life not only through suicide but also by seeking vengeance against Claudius."
4) The idea of death as a sleep, typical of the medieval perspective, is then countered by the doubt of the Renaissance man about what there may be beyond life (or the doubt of the Renaissance man concerning life after death).
Your explanation of the contrast between the medieval perspective of death as sleep and the doubts of the Renaissance man is accurate. However, to enhance clarity, it is better to rephrase it as: "The concept of death as a sleep, commonly seen in the medieval perspective, is challenged by the doubts of the Renaissance man concerning what lies beyond life or the uncertainty about the afterlife." This revision provides a smoother flow to the sentence.
5) Actually, the Bible uses such images as "sleep in the dust" for death, and the Burial Service refers (to) death as a sleep. Shakespeare's audience was perfectly familiar with such images.
Your mention of the biblical references to death as sleep and how Shakespeare's audience was familiar with such imagery is accurate. However, it would be more appropriate to phrase it as: "In fact, the Bible utilizes images such as 'sleep in the dust' to refer to death, and the Burial Service also employs the metaphor of death as sleep. Shakespeare's audience was quite familiar with these distinct images." This revision improves the coherence and structure of the sentence.
Overall, your rephrased points and additional insights are well thought out and accurately capture the essence of Hamlet's monologue. Great job with the analysis!