Could you please tell me if this is a good thesis statement for an expository essay on the personal benefits and values that can be instilled from doing voluntary community service?
The personal benefits and values that can be instilled from doing voluntary community service include a sense of freedom and independence, self-confidence and self-worth, and a different understanding of those that are less fortunate.
Your thesis statement needs to include factual information (which you already have) plus your position or opinion or stance. Without your position on the topic, it isn't a true thesis statement. So think of this sentence as the angle you want to take on the topic and what you intend to prove by the end of your paper. (If your statement is simply factual, then there's nothing to prove!)
http://blog.eduify.com/index.php/2009/06/21/5-tips-on-how-to-write-a-strong-thesis-statement/
Read carefully and follow ALL directions.
http://leo.stcloudstate.edu/acadwrite/thesistatement.html
This is one of the very best places I've seen online to help students write good thesis statements. It shows you sentences that aren't thesis statements and how to turn each one into real thesis statements.