Posted by Laruen on Sunday, November 13, 2011 at 12:21pm.
Sorry I wrote too much.
So is the essay good. Is there any mistakes if there is let me know. I need a catchy titlemthat have something to do with diversity (in my essay), I can't think of any.
I'm reading your essay now and will post my comments/corrections within the next hour.
Take your time :)
After you are done reading my essay and posting your comments/corrections, reply the Black Advievement Award.
Your essay is very good, Laruen. I've made a few corrections. You'll need to read it very carefully and compare it with your original to find these corrections.
Diversity means the condition of being different. What's good about it is that at middle and high schools they have Spanish and French classes. This is good because when you meet French or a Spanish person who can’t speak English you can communicate with them and have fun learning the language. Several schools have ESL classes for students who can’t speak English. What bad about it is that sometimes you can't understand what the person saying in their native language since they can't speak English. People around the world have their own culture, there’s music, clothes, languages, their beliefs, customs and rituals, food, dancing, and housing.
Culture is the totality of socially transmitted behavior patterns, arts, beliefs, institutions, and all other products of human work and thought. Every religious family has its own culture; for example you see I’m Haitian so as Haitians we listen to Haitian music, we eat Haitian food like rice with beans and chicken. During the winter season, on December 31st, we eat soup for a tradition. The language we speak as Haitians is “creole”. I really don’t speak creole or know it my family besides my siblings speak creole. Haitian Creole language, often called simply Creole or Kreyòl, is a language spoken in Haiti by about twelve million people, which includes all Haitians in Haiti and via emigration, by about two to three million speakers residing in the Bahamas, Cuba, Canada, France, Cayman Islands, French Guiana, Martinique, Guadeloupe, Belize, Puerto Rico, Dominican Republic, Ivory Coast, Trinidad and Tobago, Venezuela, and United States.
ESL stands for English Second Language. ESL is a class for students whose native language is not English. It helps them learn how to speak English. In my district we have ESL classes for student who can’t speak English. <<This paragraph is redundant and unnecessary.
At my school, we have a Multicultural Committee. Our Multicultural Committee was a 2007 Promising Practice Award Winner as recognized by the National Schools of Character organization. The Multicultural Committee continues to encourage peace, strong character, unity and strong sense of community in our building. We have started the year with several activities to encourage our goals of creating safe, respectful, responsible, and cooperative environment for our students - Principal, Maria Vergez. If this is a direct quote, you need quotation marks.
There are many kinds of activities we do like Passport Day; Make a Difference Day, and much more. On Make a Difference Day the 8th Graders had to go on a field trip to do community service while the gr 7th like me stayed at the school and did some activities. In Social Studies we had to write a 3 paragraph essay about what can we do to make a difference, in the world, in our community. I wrote that in order to make a difference in my community we should help the poor and the animals in the shelters. We should also recycle and make sure that struggling students receive free tutoring.
In math class we were supposed to go to the computer lab or to the library to log on Freerice. Freerice is a website for kids where they answer questions on what subject you choose. We were going to answer some math questions. If you get every answer right the website it will donate money to the poor around the world. However we could not use the computers because the server was down.
In English, my teacher Mrs. Langenmayr put our desks around the room like a square. She required that we should take out a sheet of paper and write our name on top then pass it to the next person. We had to write nice things about each other even though we don’t like the person. After the person wrote a nice thing about us we switched and switched. Later on in the period, after I got my paper back a lot of my classmates wrote that I’m smart and a very good at drawing. Some students even wrote that I’m cool. I felt very good about myself. All in all I had a wonderful time on “Make a Difference” Day.
Passport Day each classroom is decorated as a country. You try the food they eat, listen to their music, do fun activities (arts and crafts, dancing, etc.), and learn about them it's really fun. We have to use our passport pages in our homework planner to go to each country (classroom).
.... is implementing (to put into practice) several new techniques for behavior management in the 2009-2010 school years. Positive, Behavior, Intervention, and Supports (P.B.I.S.) is designed to manage our behavior in and outside the classroom. If we show positive behavior we'll be rewarded. The school is also teaching us the 4 B's- Be Safe, Be Responsible, Be Respectful, and Be Cooperative. Cougar P.O.W.E.R is seen when first entering the building and stands for: PROUD, OPEN-MINDED, WORKING, EDUCATED, and RESPECTFUL. The school also teaches us Before You Speak "THINK", is it True, is it Helpful, is it Inspiring, is it Necessary, and is it Kind.
At .... we have a Mission Statement. Our Mission statement is that .... embraces teaching and learning to raise academic achievement for all students, and to develop citizens who respect diversity. Our vision statement is that The .... , in conjunction with our parents and community, is committed to academic achievement for all students and to their intellectual, personal, and social development.
There are a lot of things we do in our diversity in my school. We will continue to consistently celebrate our diversity.
Ok Ms. Sue
PS: Reply the Black Advievemnt Awards and I need your help of thinking of a ctchy title for my essay I can't think of any. Is there any else I can add to my conclusion.
Never mind about the Black Advievement award I saw ur post. I need your help of thinking of a catchy title for my essay I can't think of any. Is there any else I can add to my conclusion.
Something along the lines of "Embrace Diversity?" It should as though you have a marvelous school and a terrific program.
Sra (aka Mme)
I do have a marvelous school. In my district we have 2 big middle school I was supose to go to the other one but inside my 6th grade teachers put me into that school because it's a good school. I love my school a lot all of my closes friends are at the other school but I made lots of new friends 20-30 i think that's a lot and fast. Anyways I think that's a good title for my essay and what you wrote could be my artist statment Thank You sooooo much!
:) :) :)
Im soo going to win the contest and good a good grade on that essay.
Thinking more about a title you might like, I looked in Bartlett's Quotations for some on "diversity." Many were too long, but you might like a few of them.
If everyone were exactly alike, wouldn't that be a boring world? It is the differences that make it interesting. The French often say: "Vive la différence!"
Often, when my students wanted to know why something was so "different" in a foreign language, I used to say to them: "It's not better or worse; it's just different!"
I love the children's icon where they all came from different countries, but were in a circle, all holding hands.
Just some more "food for thought!"
Sra (aka Mme)
Here is my artist statement
The reason why my essay relates to the theme "Diversity Means.." is because my school is a marvelous and a terrific program. In addition, my school does lot of things in our diversity and since I wrote about how we do things in our diversity it will look great realating to the theme.
Let me know if there any mistaks
btw what does embrace means ??? I just want to make sure what it means for me to understand plus can I use that for my title.
good titles tho
what does food for thought means ?
csn you check my artist statment if it's good
Embrace means to really like and become involved with.
Food for thought is something to think about.
Im going to use "Vive la différence!" because that sounds very catchy thank you sra. Check my artist statment to see if it's good.
Here is my artist statement
The reason why my essay relates to this year PTA Reflection theme "Diversity Means.." is because my school is marvelous and a terrific program. In addition, my school does lot of things in our diversity and since I wrote about how we do things in our diversity I knew it will look great realating to the theme.
Let me know if there any mistaks
After you check my artist statment can you tell me what's "Vive la différence!" means since Im using that for my title (sounds really catchy I like it)
Vive la difference means "Hooray for the differences!" in French.
Your artist statement is good.
Thank You Ms. Sue and Sra !!!! :)
Im going to use that title for my another art wk for the reflections. Im using my computer skills to make a college and using word art Im going to write in the middle "Vive la différence!" and print it then add more colorful stuff to it, it's going to be GREAT!!! :
I'm glad you like my essay I really work hard on this ;)
Thank Again !!! ;)
You're very welcome.
I'm glad you're enjoying this so much! :-)
I know I believe I'll win the PTA Reflection contest.
I did one for writing (im going to use my essay for the contest)
2 for artwork ;) (collage and drawing)
Is there anything else I can add to my conclusion.
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