posted by Zahra Fradi on .
I need help to see if my grammar is proper, and if not please help me this is my first paragraph. :)
Fables are short stories that have animals as characters. A fable teaches a moral, and morals are valuable lessons. So, all fables teach us lessons at the end children learn lessons from fables they don’t just waste time. I think fables are often told to children more than told to adults because they drag the child's attention more. When a lesson is taught to a child he or she will take it it in their personality as they grow. I think teaching morals to children is a positive thing because in stead of preaching at the child, and annoying them by repeating a lesson like; responsibility or lying. Fables teach children the lesson in a way that attracts their attention, and will tell them the consequences of the negative act like lying or being irresponsible.
Here is a very long, cumbersome sentence: "So, all fables teach us lessons at the end children learn lessons from fables they don’t just waste time." = after lessons you could end the sentence or use a semicolon. Rather than "at the end" what about "in the end" and after fables, end the sentence or use another semicolon. Two semicolons in one sentence seem like one too man y?
Rather than "drag" the attention, "capture?"
their personality = his/her
Well done for your first paragrah! The best way to write a good paragraph or essay is to begin with a good sentence!