Posted by Nicole on .
This is my thesis so far for a compare and contrast essay on Se Habla Entitlement and Border on Our Backs...These two essays state the rights that the Mexicans have in the US and what issues could arise from them. I know it is not perfect.
Can someone help me perfect it?
These two essays state the rights that the Mexicans have in the US and what issues could arise from them. However, although each writer spoke about these topics, they each view it through a different lens.
You need to clarify whom you mean. Does "Mexicans" mean Mexican-Americans? Mexican citizens who are in the US legally? Mexican citizens who are in the US illegally?
Without that clarification, your thesis is terribly hard to understand.
Plus ... have you written at least the outline for your entire paper? If you haven't, then you need to concentrate on that before you worry much more about your thesis.
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I have written a a outline and my teacher said it was good. the article does not specify whether they are legal or not and it does not specify which sect of Mexicans.