This is my thesis so far for a compare and contrast essay on Se Habla Entitlement and Border on Our Backs...These two essays state the rights that the Mexicans have in the US and what issues could arise from them. I know it is not perfect.
Can someone help me perfect it?
thanks
updated version:
These two essays state the rights that the Mexicans have in the US and what issues could arise from them. However, although each writer spoke about these topics, they each view it through a different lens.
You need to clarify whom you mean. Does "Mexicans" mean Mexican-Americans? Mexican citizens who are in the US legally? Mexican citizens who are in the US illegally?
Without that clarification, your thesis is terribly hard to understand.
Plus ... have you written at least the outline for your entire paper? If you haven't, then you need to concentrate on that before you worry much more about your thesis.
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I have written a a outline and my teacher said it was good. the article does not specify whether they are legal or not and it does not specify which sect of Mexicans.
Of course! I'd be happy to help you refine your thesis statement for your compare and contrast essay on the essays "Se Habla Entitlement" and "Border on Our Backs." Let's work together to make it more precise and effective.
First, it's important to have a clear and concise thesis statement that clearly states your main argument. Here's a suggested revision:
"While both 'Se Habla Entitlement' and 'Border on Our Backs' discuss the rights of Mexicans in the US, they offer contrasting perspectives on the implications and potential challenges resulting from these rights."
In this revised thesis statement, we have specified the focus of the essays, which is the rights of Mexicans in the US. By mentioning the contrasting perspectives, we also highlight the basis of the comparison and contrast that will be explored in your essay.
Remember, your thesis statement should provide a roadmap for your essay and guide your reader on what to expect. Make sure to support your thesis statement with evidence from the essays and clearly explain how the authors' views differ.
Additionally, it's important to keep in mind that your thesis statement should evolve as you develop your essay. As you delve deeper into the content and analysis of the essays, you may find opportunities to adjust and refine your thesis statement accordingly.
Good luck with your essay, and if you have any more questions or need further assistance, feel free to ask!