Can you guys proof read part of an essay im writing. I know you do not know the context but, im just talking about the grammar issue.
here it is:
Along with the tension that goes on between Mr. And Mrs. Bennet, Charlotte and Mr. Collin’s marriage is not all happy giddy. Charlotte is considerably old for a single woman at the time. So, because of this, she is eager to get married. To her it does not matter whether she likes the husband to be or not, it matters that her future husband holds a sizable income. “…Charlotte took her sister and friend over the house, extremely pleased, probably, to have the opportunity of showing it without her husband’s help” (152) This shows that she would rather be independent than bound by a man. Elizabeth’s thought goes on to say “…When Mr. Collins could be forgotten, there was really an air of great comfort throughout, and by Charlotte’s evident enjoyment of it, Elizabeth supposed he must be often forgotten. (152)” Charlotte clearly is more happy when she is away from Mr. Collins than with him. The only reason for this marriage therefore would have been for Mr. Collins secure income. Observably, one can see that Charlotte’s morals do not include marrying for love. This reinforces that idea that wealth will not achieve happiness in any marriage.
In addition to the Charlotte’s despondent marriage, Lydia and Wickham’s marriage suggests the parallel. But, this time it is Wickham, the husband, that is in the marriage for the hope of wealth and not because of his affection. “Though Mr. Bennet was not imagined to be very rich, he would have been able to do something for him and his situation much have been benefited by marriage. But, he found in reply to this question that Wickham still cherished the hope of more effectually making his fortune by marriage in some other country. (307)” This comes as a shock to the reader, because of Wickham’s apparent scheme. Mr. Wickham’s idea was to stay with Lydia and pretend to be deeply in love with her, this was possible because as seen in Elizabeth’s case he can persuade a woman, because her family had a moderate amount of money. But, he would only stay with her until a superior woman came along with more money to her name.
I have retyped the paragraph with a few corrections that I felt were necessary.
Along with the tension that goes on between Mr. and Mrs. Bennet, Charlotte and Mr. Collins' marriage is not all happy giddy. Charlotte is considerably old for a single woman at the time and because of this, she is quite eager to get married. To her, it does not matter whether she likes the groom, it matters that her future husband holds a sizable income. “Charlotte took her sister and friend over the house, extremely pleased, probably, to have the opportunity of showing it without her husband’s help. (152)" This shows that she would rather be independent than bound by a man. Elizabeth’s thought goes on to say “When Mr. Collins could be forgotten, there was really an air of great comfort throughout, and by Charlotte’s evident enjoyment of it, Elizabeth supposed he must be often forgotten. (152)” Charlotte is clearly more happy when away from Mr. Collins than with him. Therefore, the only reason for this marriage would have been for Mr. Collins' secure income. Observably, one can see that Charlotte’s morals do not include marrying for love. This reinforces the idea that wealth will not achieve happiness in any marriage.
In addition to the Charlotte’s despondent marriage, Lydia and Wickham’s marriage suggests the parallel (odd phrase imo). But, this time it is Wickham, the husband, that is in the marriage for the hope of wealth rather than affection. “Though Mr. Bennet was not imagined to be very rich, he would have been able to do something for him and his situation much have been benefited by marriage. But, he found in reply to this question that Wickham still cherished the hope of more effectually making his fortune by marriage in some other country. (307)” This comes as a shock to the reader, because of Wickham’s apparent scheme. Mr. Wickham’s idea was to stay with Lydia and pretend to be deeply in love with her, this was possible because, as seen in Elizabeth’s case, he can persuade a woman, because her family had a moderate amount of money (run on sentence, try breaking up). But, he would only stay with her until a superior woman came along with more money to her name.
Obviously I have no context for this essay, so I apologize if I changed something that made sense with context. Hope i help.