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I was wondering if you could help me revise this?
Questions plague the mind of many readers of why exactly Tessie Hutchinson was stoned in Shirley Jackson’s, “The Lottery”. This gruesome tale tells of an innocent woman stoned in a small village of 300 people. In doing so, the community thought that their motives would aid them in they’re intentions to grow crops successfully. No one can relate to Jackson’s story but when South Africa banned her story, her only reply was "well at least they understand it". Mrs. Jackson’s vague statement opens up a realm of an depth analysis on what basis this torture was done and if banning of the document justified this or made them realize their mistake.
The sacrificial stoning of Tessie Hutchinson on the 27th day in June was carried out heedlessly. Keeping the tradition alive are two of the eldest men of the entire village, Old man Warner and Mr. Summers. Countless amounts of villagers reactions upon being reminded of the reason of the ritual, I believe are significantly coward like. The other villagers who did not appear to be bothered by the stoning of Tessie display actions are comparable to zombies, demonic, and brainwashed.
Normally, a loved one being put to death would make one utterly emotional but the Hutchinson family all showed no anguish. Nancy and Bill Jr. both being Tessie’s older children and the two create the impression that they are truly peppy neither of them have the black dot. “Nancy and Bill Jr. opened theirs at the same time, and both beamed and laughed, turning around to the crowd and holding their slips of paper above their heads”. The joining of the village (including her family) to stone Mrs. Hutchinson was done more out of tradition and rituals than out of actual delinquency. The small village of people seem to believe that every year one person is sacrificed for healthy growth of crops. “Lottery in June, corn be heavy soon” quoted old man Warner.
Now, the fiction story of the lottery was in no way directed towards any one country, state, person, etc. directly. Soon after the release of “The Lottery” tons of hate mail was sent to The New Yorker (a popular magazine company), and “hundreds of readers canceled their subscriptions“. “Even Jackson’s parents wrote her a letter disapproving of her story”. Of all the upsetting feedback Shirley was receiving from her story, the most drastic measure taken to ensure the entries obliteration was when South Africa banned her story completely (which made Mrs. Jackson proud). Personally, I would have been hurt but, Jackson’s response was “well at least they understand it”. I think she meant when she said “Well at least they understand it” that South Africa has perceived as having many of the cruelest practices known to man.
And although there is no accrediting resource that precedes me to assume whether or not stoning was taking place in 1948, there is evidence that “voters of South Africa are allowing a government policy too continue which drastically limits the freedom of millions of black inhabitants”. A tradition South Africa has yet to cease. But if the very people of South Africa are the same people keeping this belittling tradition around who’s not to say they stopped stoning people? I would not be surprised if I did hear that South Africa stones the “black inhabitants” they confine.
A gruesome fiction story entitled “The Lottery” by Shirley Jackson was published in 1948. In this same year South Africa banned it. Jackson’s only reply was "well at least they understand it” she also stated “If your only reason for doing something is that you've always done it, might not be a reason at all”.
I thought I corrected the next error the other evening: they're = their intentions to grow crops.
an depth analysis = an indepth analysis
villagers reactions = villagers' reactions
I believe are = I believe, are, etc.
coward like = coward-like
actions are = actions that are comparable
zombies is a noun so the next 2 words should also be in noun form (not adjective)
You need to rework this entire sentence: "Nancy and Bill Jr. both being Tessie’s older children and the two create the impression that they are truly peppy neither of them have the black dot." (run-on sentence among other things)
opened theirs = the antecedent is not clear = envelope? slips of paper?
fiction story = 2 nouns = fictional story
entries obliteration = entry's obliteration
South Africa has perceived = has been perceived
precedes me to assume ?????not understood at all = allows? persuades?
policy too continue = policy to continue
fiction story = still better as fictional story
run-on sentence = understand it” she also stated “ = either period . She OR ; she
done it, might not be a reason at all”.
= done it, it might not be, etc.