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Freedom Doesn’t Come Free
What is something you can never show much gratitude for? Well, veterans have done many things for our country. Freedom is a debt that can never be repaid that veterans have done for country.
One reason I said they fought for freedom was because they wanted everyone to be treated the same and fought for those rights. Even though it was hard, they tried and tried until some of those veterans couldn’t any more. Many people don’t even think twice about why we honor Veteran’s Day on November 11. Some people don’t feel the need to celebrate certain holidays, especially this one, if it doesn’t pertain to them. I think Veteran’s Day is a wonderful holiday to celebrate because many people lost their loved ones trying to help us. However, not many people care about veterans, but I do. Freedom symbolizes our country’s flag. Freedom is a mighty word that affects everyone who wants their rights to be recognized. I can surely recall the time I went on a field trip to Baton Rouge. We had gone inside this building and they were honoring Veterans on that day. They had many photos of excellent human beings that served us. Freedom is real and not a joke, people. It’s time to stop what you’re doing and say a few words to the living or deceased veterans and thank them. Veterans are someone we can’t stop showing faith and love too. We are going to make a difference too! “All the great things are simple, and many can be expressed in a single word: freedom, justice, honor, duty, merciful, and hope,” a quote once said by Winston Churchill. “My country tis of thee, sweet land of liberty, of thee I sing. Land where my fathers died! Land of the Pilgrim's pride! From every mountain side, let freedom ring!” That’s the song that comes to mind when I hear the words veterans and patriots, because it captures vivid pictures of veterans fighting and protecting us. As you can see, veterans are what freedom is all about.
In conclusion, freedom is real because it’s a debt that can never be repaid by our veterans. Veterans don’t come around too much, so get to know about some of the veterans and thank them on this Veteran’s Day on November 11. What do you think?
Writing - Ms. Sue, Wednesday, October 5, 2011 at 10:17pm
Your sentiments are admirable. But your facts aren't all correct.
You say, "One reason I said they fought for freedom was because they wanted everyone to be treated the same and fought for those rights."
African-Americans and white Americans were segregated in the armed forces until after World War II. Filippinos could only serve as servants during WW II. Women had limited status and still are often harassed. And gays and lesbians have just within the last few weeks have been able to serve their country openly.
I suggest you let this essay sit for a day or two and try again.