My interests are do to the misdiagnosed illnesses of my father, which is the field of Medical Coding and Billing.
>> "do to" = ???
>> "misdiagnosed illnesses" = "the field of Medical Coding and Billing" ????
This sentence needs major revision. For one thing, I think you mean "due to," right? No spell checker will pick that up because there's no spelling error; it's a word-choice error. In addition, the word "which" at the beginning of that relative clause seems to refer to "illness" (I hope it doesn't refer to "father"!!) -- but I doubt any illness is the same as the "field of medical coding and billing," right? Also there should be no capital letters here except at the beginning of the sentence.
My father had cancer, which was misdiagnosed by a doctor at Stanford Medical Hospital. Its formal name is Stanford Hospital & Clinics. http://stanfordhospital.org/
He was told he just had an infection which required an I.V. of antibiotics for several weeks. My mother was told by the doctors of this diagnose.<~~word? She thought it was wrong.<~~Combine those last two sentences. http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/combining_skills.htm
The diagnose<~~word? was documented and with incorrect coding, years later, we discovered this.~~<This sentence needs rephrasing to be smoother and to have the ideas connected more logically.
There are similar errors throughout the rest of the paragraph. It's not a terrible paragraph, but it's rough and needs smoothing out and correcting if you want it to be an example of polished writing.
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First of thankyou! I appreciate your input.
I rewrote a different paragraph.
During my online research, I was very excited to learn about the current opening for a medical coding position in your organization. I feel my qualifications and your requirements are a good match. I have been very interested in medical coding since my father's illnesses. I was always interested in what the doctors had written down in my father's charts or medical records. This curiousitly stayed with me. I thought what if the doctor entered the wrong information. This would create the wrong coding to be entered as well. The wrong coding would lead to wrong billing. Then the wrong billing would lead to patients not getting bills paid. The list went on. I started thinking I want to go to school and learn more in this field. I now want to use those skills and my knowledge to be the one who enters that information correctly, which is medical coding. I feel I am the right person for this position. I am detailed oriented and very proficient.
oops! First off thankyou!
What do you think of the revised paragraph? I really changed the whole paragraph, is it better?