posted by Stacey on .
A perfect person or in other words, a goody-toe shoes is someone that has to have everything right. I'm not a perfect person, but I like things a certain way. Well, in the story, "The Possibility of Evil," a woman named Miss Strangeworth was that perfect person.
There are many traits that fit Miss Strangeworth, but one main trait was miss perfect. First, one example would be how she wanted everything right and her way especially when she wrote her secret gossip letters. Another example would be she had tobe on time for everything and no to delay turning something in. Last example would be she wanted her town to be the very best just like her home was. I would like to be on time for things just not too early and I also would like my city and home to look good, but not going over the top. In conclusion, Miss Strangeworth is a woman who's quick and fast on her feet to do everything.
As you can see,a trait that describes Miss Strangeworth is miss perfect. If you just like her, you get everything done faster and don't have time to procrastinate, you can relax. Even though you might not wait till the last minute or day late, but you decide to work on something three or two more days ahead before it's due, you're not like Miss Strangeworth exactly. You have your own way of things.
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I revised it myself, I posted for someone else to look and tell me what I need to fix.
A perfectionist is someone who has to have everything just right. I'm not a perfectionist, but I like things a certain way. <~~That needs explaining! You seem to be contradicting yourself. Well,<~~Delete "Well" - it's slang. in the story, "The Possibility of Evil," a woman named Miss Strangeworth was that perfectionist.
A "perfect person" doesn't exist, but perfectionists do. http://www.answers.com/perfectionist
In addition, perfectionists are not the same as people referred to as "goody two [not toe]-shoes."
Your paper is filled with word choice errors and slang. Please read your paragraphs aloud to someone who will be able to hear these slang and other word choice errors and point them out. Then correct them and repost.
My mother and I didn't see any more slang, but the one you told me. we read it out loud, but couldn't find none. Any more examples of slang in my story?