Posted by Stacey on Tuesday, August 30, 2011 at 5:49pm.
Please go over your paper with the following in mind; then repost with your corrected paragraphs. Thanks to PsyDAG for the following:
In the future, if nobody is available to proofread your work, you can do this yourself. After writing your material, put it aside for a day — at least several hours. (This breaks mental sets you might have that keep you from noticing problems.) Then read it aloud as if you were reading someone else's work. (Reading aloud slows down your reading, so you are less likely to skip over problems.)
(You can also either read it aloud to someone else or have someone else read it aloud to you! The latter works really well!)
If your reading goes smoothly, that is fine. However, wherever you "stumble" in your reading, other people are likely to have a problem in reading your material. Those "stumbles" indicate areas that need revising.
Once you have made your revisions, repeat the process above. Good papers often require many drafts.
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And here are three really good websites that will help, too.
http://blog.eduify.com/index.php/2009/10/28/editing-secrets-everyone-should-know/
http://teacher.sheboyganfalls.k12.wi.us/staff/dehogue/FSSH/proof.htm
http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/composition/proofing.htm
I revised it myself, I posted for someone else to look and tell me what I need to fix.
A perfectionist is someone who has to have everything just right. I'm not a perfectionist, but I like things a certain way. <~~That needs explaining! You seem to be contradicting yourself. Well,<~~Delete "Well" - it's slang. in the story, "The Possibility of Evil," a woman named Miss Strangeworth was that perfectionist.
A "perfect person" doesn't exist, but perfectionists do. http://www.answers.com/perfectionist
In addition, perfectionists are not the same as people referred to as "goody two [not toe]-shoes."
Your paper is filled with word choice errors and slang. Please read your paragraphs aloud to someone who will be able to hear these slang and other word choice errors and point them out. Then correct them and repost.
My mother and I didn't see any more slang, but the one you told me. we read it out loud, but couldn't find none. Any more examples of slang in my story?
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