posted by pria on .
can u please help me make these senetnces sound better.
1)Alfred through his surrounding misery strived for success and with the use of poetry established himself at Cambridge.
2)He soon became a well known poet all over the world.
3)It no surprise, that his spirituality and his devotion to god created his bedrock for success.
thanks for correcting my sentences!!!
my teacher says that my sentences are too wordy..is there a way i can improve this mistake
When the sentences are too wordy, it means you have to shorten them. What are the basic words you feel you MUST have in the sentence to convey your information? Leave the rest out.
2. well-known poet
3. It's no surprise, etc. but capitalize God