posted by Kelly on .
Could you please help me re word my paragrah? It needs to be at least 100 words.
Media convergence is the merging of mass communications outlets such as television, radio and the Internet along with portable and interactive technologies though various digital presentation platforms. Media convergence allows mass media professionals to tell and present information and entertainment using a variety of media. One example of early media convergence was WebTV which has tended to be much less important as the performance/cost of PC's has improved to eliminate the perceived benefits of combining the Internet with television. Other examples of mass media convergence are print and television, radio and internet. Media convergence is a phenomenon as revolutionary to communication as the invention of movable type or electronic communication.
It looks like you have enough words (110). Sentence one is quite long so you might put a comma after Internet (Internet, along) If this were to be read outloud, the comma would give you a pause for breath.
A suggestion would be for you to read this outloud. That will tell you where the sentence is too long.
The information is there.