posted by Kelly on .
COuld you please help me re word this sentence-
Social media sites have affected commerce because people can advertise to thousands of people all at once through different sites.
Social media websites have influenced commerce greatly because vendors can advertise to thousands of people all at once through different websites.
Can you help me re do this paragraph that I did. I keep looking over it an am not happy but can not think of anyway to change it.
Convergence in the context of media refers to the technology driven unification of different media channels. Media convergence allows mass media professionals to tell and present information and entertainment using a variety of media. Convergence is part of a much broader change in the media that is being brought about by new technology. For many years different media were clearly separated: broadcast TV, broadcast radio, newspapers, books, video and film, recorded music etc. Media convergence is a phenomenon as revolutionary to communication as the invention of movable type or electronic communication. Media convergence is always evolving, but its best application likely will be with computers, utilizing the endless capabilities of the Internet.
I take it you need to paraphrase what someone else has written. YOU need to do that, and then someone here will check it for you.
Here are some ideas about how to go about paraphrasing someone else's ideas. And don't forget to add the correct citation -- you need to cite sources that you quote, paraphrase, or summarize.
I have done all of this and the above paragraph is what I came up with, but to me it still does not look right. This is my own work and I have already sent it through plagiarism and it came back with 3%. Now I am needing someone's help.
The above paragraph is plagiarized. Please take the time to read and use the ideas in the link I posted above.