Please post your paragraphs when you have written them, and someone here will give you feedback.
The topic that I have chosen to research for my persuasive essay is on whether “Credit card companies should not be on campus marketing to college students”. The point of view that I will be taking on “Credit card companies should not be on campus marketing to college students” is that I would be agreeing with that stamens and supporting the facts behind it.
The plan that I have in order to support the stamen is to research the topic and find evidence that show facts, logic, examples and finding experts opinions that show how credit cards have affected college students and how it continues to affect them as a population. That why the reader can take on what I am trying to show the individual.
My overall position is to educate other individual on the affects that credit card marketing to college students can be very bad. Credit card marketing to college students can start them in a path of bad credit because of the fast buying that can bill. As well as the emotional and physical stress it could lead to.
You have written up your plan. "I plan to..." "I would be agreeing..." etc.
Please write your 3 paragraphs without any use of "I" or "you" or any of their forms.
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