Before I do the comic strip. I made a summary of the main events that happened at the Red River Colony to grasp a better idea of the comic strip project. Since I'm doing the summary. Could I get some help shortening sentences. Cause I need help writing those dialouge things at the bottom of the strips. I've folded my big sheet of paper into 24 little squares. In each of those squares, I have to draw people like the Metis, and the Scottish settlers, and I have to write small sentences at the bottom describing what is happening in the images. Then I have to put bubbles around people, and say what they are saying. But that's where I am having trouble. Here is the summary that I accomplished all by myself researching and researching.

CRITERIA

-Main ideas r contained in organized sequence.

-pictures and dialouges tell story

-uses speech, expression, and thought bubbles neatly printed.

-uses few words that say a lot

-shows action

-characterized people/objects

-effective use of humour

Lord Selkirk is sad seeing the Scottish settlers in trouble. They are in need of food and money. The settlers only had two choices, either to move to cities and become factory workers or emigrate to British North America and become farmers. The crofters were poor and could not afford to go to British North America. Lord Selkirk decided to use his money to create agricultural colonies for the displaced crofters in the colonies. He establishes settlements in the Maritimes and in upper Canada. He establishes a farming colony in the Red River Valley to solve problems of the HBC and the Scottish settlers. The farmers would have good fertile in the new land area and the HBC could use their produce to supply employees at much less expense. Selkirk's grant is created. Selkirk and the HBC do not care about the people already living in that region. Miles Macdonnel leads the Scottish and Irish labourers to Red River. They reach York factory late, and do not reach Red River until very late period of time. This group is joined by other colonists. As they reach Red River..the weather does not support them as its a harsh winter. They go to the NWC post of Fort Pembina. In Spring, Miles Macdonnel leads his group back to Red River. The colonists are shocked to see the failure of their crops, the climate, and are tired of the work they have to get done. They were hungry and had to go back to Fort Pembina for food. A second group of colonists landed at the wrong factory by mistake and faced harsh weather. During next year of spring, they arrived at the Red River colony. Macdonnel issues his Pemmican Proclamation because he does not want to run out of food again. His proclamation bans sales and stops the Pemmican from getting exported. The Metis are angry. Macdonnel tells the NWC to leave the Red River Valley. Duncan Cameron, the NWC chief trader directs the NWC and the Metis and together they harrass the colonist by burning buildings, trampling crops, and firing rifles at night. Cameron tells the colonists to leave and arrests Macdonnel. Robertson tells the colonists to go back to Red River Valley, and they do. He makes peace with the Metis and the NWC. Robert Semple is the new governor and arrives with 84 new colonists. Robertson tells Semple to be careful of attacks, Semple does not listen. Semple attacks and burns the NWC fort Gibraltar. This action told the Metis that the Selkirk colonists wanted war. Cuthbert Grant leads group of Metis, attacks group of HBC boats on Assinbone River - to west of Red River. They put away a supply of pemmican, which they viewed as a fairly good reward for Macdonnel’s Pemmican Proclamation two years earlier. A month later, Grant and a party of Métis arrived at the Red River colony. They were better armed and trained in military discipline this time. They believed that they had a right over this area, and not the recent colonists. Grant was also an employee of the NWC. Semple and his 28 men rode out to face the Metis, who were coming near the colonist’s settlement. The Métis split into 2 groups, one in front of the colonists and one behind. Within 15 minutes, Semple and 20 of his men, but only one Metis were killed. This battle was called the battle of oaks. The Colonists left to Jack River House, and once again the colony was destroyed. Selkirk was arriving to see his colony for the very first time. He hired a group of 95 Swiss mercenaries to be on his side, and to support him, and in return he promised to give them some land. On the way he met Macdonnel who told him of the Battle of Oaks. Selkirk got angry and moved west with his troops, took away the NWC depot of Fort William, and moved down on the Red River. He took military control of the area. Protected by swiss soldiers, the colonists started over for a third time. Selkirk made treaty with local Ojibwa and Cree nations, gaining possession of the Red River Valley along both Red River and Assiniboine River. Selkirk’s payment, for what amounted to a lease, was 100 pounds of tobacco a year. After Selkirk left the area, he had thought that he had handled the dispute between the colonist and the metis and the NWC. When he returned to London, he was faced with a flood if lawsuits arising from the actions of employees in the Red River. For the next 3 years, he battled the NWC in the courts. He died in 1820, worned out by this litigation.

Your sentences are short enough. But you have far too many sentences.

Pick out the 24 most important facts.

For instance, here's the information for the first box.
"Lord Selkirk is sad seeing the Scottish settlers in trouble. They are in need of food and money."

Second box:
"He establishes a farming colony in the Red River Valley to solve problems of the HBC and the Scottish settlers. The farmers would have good fertile land in the new area and the HBC could use their produce to supply employees at much less expense."

Yeah that's the thing. There are too many sentences. And it's hard picking out the important stuff.

I don't understand the term Crofters? Whats another word for that? Settlers?

Crofter: person who lives and works on a small farm in Great Britain

Im going through the sentences..and I don't understand this sentence much. I simplified it for me to understand, but it doesn't make sense.

They put away a supply of pemmican, which they viewed as a fairly good reward for Macdonnel’s Pemmican Proclamation two years earlier.

Lord Selkirk is sad seeing the Scottish settlers in trouble. They are in need of food and money.

The settlers have a choice of moving to cites or immigrating to British North America. The settlers do not have enough money to emigrate.

Lord Selkirk establishes settlements in the Maritimes and in Upper Canada. He establishes a farming colony in the Red River Valley to solve problems of the HBC and the Scottish settlers. The farmers would have good fertile in the new area, and the HBC could use their produce to supply employees at a much less expense.

Lord Selkirk asks for a land grant in the Red River Valley, a part of Rupert’s Land. Selkirk and the HBC do not care about the people already living in that region.

Miles Macdonnel leads the Scottish and Irish employees to Red River. They reach York factory late, and do not reach Red River until a long period of time.

This group is joined by other colonists, and when they reach Red River, they are not happy with the harsh wintery weather. Therefore, they decide to go back to the NWC post of Fort Pembina.

In Spring, Macdonnel leads his group back to Red River. The colonists are shocked to see the failure of their crops, the climate, and are tired of the work they have to get done. They were hungry and had to go back to Fort Pembina for food.

A Second group of colonists land at the wrong factory by mistake and face harsh weather. During the next year of spring, they arrive the Red River colony.

Macdonnel issues his Pemmican Proclamation because he does not want to run out of food again. His proclamation bans sales and stops the Pemmican from getting exported.

The Metis are angry. Macdonnel tells the NWC to leave the Red River Valley.
Duncan Cameron, the NWC chief trader directs the NWC and the Metis, and together they harass the colonists by buring buildings, trampling crops, and firing rifles at night.

Cameron orders the colonists to leave, and arrests Macdonnel.

Robertson tells colonists to go back to Red River Valley. He makes peace with the Metis and the NWC.

Robert Semple, the new governor arrives with 84 new colonists. Robertson tells him to be careful of attacks, but Semple does not listen.

Semple attacks and burns the NWC fort Gibraltar. This actions tells the Metis that the Selkirk colonists want a war.

Cuthbert Grant leads group of Metis, attacks group of HBC boats on Assinbone River.

The put away a supply of Pemmican, which they view as a fairly good reward for Macdonnel’s Pemmican Proclamation.

A month later, Grant and a party of Metis arrive at the Red River colony. They are better armed and trained in military discipline. They believe they have a right over this area, and not the new settlers.

Semple and his 28 men ride out to face
the Metis. The Metis split into 2 groups, one in front of the settlers, and one behind.

Within 15 minutes, Semple and 20 of his men are killed, and only one Metis. The battle is named, “Battle of Oaks”

The colonists left to Jack River House, and once again the colony was destroyed. Selkirk was arriving to see his colony for the very first time. He hires a group of 95 swiss mercenaries to be on his side, and to support him. In return of their help, he promises to give them some land.

On the way, he meets Macdonnel, who tells him of the Battle of Oaks. Selkirk gets angry and moves west with his troops. He takes away the NWC depot of Fort William and moves down on the Red River. He takes military control of the area.

Selkirk makes a treaty with local Ojibwa and Cree nations, and gains possession of the Red River Valley along with both Red River and Assiniboine River.

After Selkirk leaves the area, he believes he has handled the dispute between the settlers, NWC, and the Metis.

As he arrives in Long, he is faced with a flood of lawsuits arising from the actions of employees in Red River. For the next 3 years, he battles the NWC in the courts, and dies in 1820.

They put away a supply of pemmican, which they viewed as a fairly good reward for Macdonnel’s Pemmican Proclamation two years earlier.

This means that they saved some pemmican, although the Proclamation forbade exporting it.

Your summary looks good. Have fun making it into a comic strip.

Came back from eating dinner.

This sentence is very long. Could you please make it smaller?

Lord Selkirk establishes settlements in the Maritimes and in Upper Canada. He establishes a farming colony in the Red River Valley to solve problems of the HBC and the Scottish settlers. The farmers would have good fertile in the new area, and the HBC could use their produce to supply employees at a much less expense.

A month later, Grant and a party of Metis arrive at the Red River colony. They are better armed and trained in military discipline. They believe they have a right over this area, and not the new settlers.

--Another word for military discipline?

Some other sentences could you help shorten?

I don't have a good sense of humour, so how would I add humour in the comics?

Sure! Here's a shorter version of the summary you provided:

- Lord Selkirk, seeing the Scottish settlers in trouble, decides to create agricultural colonies for them in British North America.
- He establishes settlements in the Maritimes and upper Canada, as well as a farming colony in the Red River Valley.
- Miles Macdonnel leads the Scottish and Irish laborers to Red River, facing harsh weather and a failed crop.
- Macdonnel issues the Pemmican Proclamation, angering the Metis and leading to conflicts with the NWC.
- Robert Semple becomes the new governor and attacks the NWC fort Gibraltar, escalating tensions with the Metis.
- Cuthbert Grant leads a group of Metis and defeats Semple's men in the Battle of Oaks.
- Selkirk hires Swiss mercenaries, recovers the Red River area, and makes a treaty with the local Ojibwa and Cree nations.
- Selkirk faces lawsuits and litigation upon his return to London, and dies in 1820.

With this shortened summary, you can now focus on creating your comic strip by incorporating the main events and characters in each square and adding dialogue bubbles to convey the story effectively.