Writing an essay on advertisement. If you wouldn't wear your dog, Please don't wear any fur. Is the following a good thesis. (This is only my 3 essay not to sure how)
Animals were put on this earth just like humans, so that they can live their lives, just like we do!
Animals were put on this earth just like humans, so that they can live their lives, just like we do.
is this a better theseis?
Humans have nocompassion for suffering of animals for cosmetic uses, Animals kill to eat and have no other choice,
we kill to satisfy our selfish needs.
Your thesis statement must include factual information (which you already have) plus your position/opinion/stance. Without your position on the topic, it isn't a true thesis statement. So think of this sentence as the angle you want to take on the topic and what you intend to prove by the end of your paper. (If your statement is simply factual, then there's nothing to prove!)
Read carefully and follow ALL directions.
This is one of the very best places I've seen online to help students write good thesis statements. It shows you sentences that aren't thesis statements and how to turn each one into real thesis statements.
I have rewritten my thesis. how is it now
Although people wouldn’t wear their dogs, for the desire to appear fashionable, many animals are killed, and therefore we must not wear any fur.