Homework Help: English writing

Posted by Babouchka on Sunday, April 10, 2011 at 7:41am.

Hello!

I have written an article about childhood's best friend.
I'd be glad if someone can help me to correct my mistake or others.
thank you

Hello!

I'm franch and I'm studying english.
I have written an article about chilhood's best friend.
I'd be glad if someone can help me to correct my mistake.
Thank you

Childhood's twins

As a child hadn't you had a favourite friend? Who was your partner whatever you did. Certainly the only one you confessed your dreams. Most of us remembered their best times with this particular person.

During my first day at school I met her. Already when I had arrived I noticed her. Actually she looked the same as me. She smiled all her teeth and from her brown eyes. Her blonde hair was made into a ponytail with a straight fringe. She also wore dress and shoes similar to mine. My mother confessed me one day she had thought it had been my clone.

Quickly we became closed. After school if I wasn't at her home she was at mine. Moreover we never got bored. The most exciting was during holiday when parent let us invited each other for a whole week. In fact we pretended to be singers waited by the whole world for a concert. Actually we repeated before we had to made amazing costumes for representations.

I always remember all this spent with her as the best part of an easy and soft childhood.

English writing - SraJMcGin, Sunday, April 10, 2011 at 10:29am
French & English (note spelling and capitalization)

The first paragraph may be the prompt but here are some corrections:
the only one to whom you confessed...

Paragraph 2: the same as I (do)
She smiled with all her teeth
wore a dress and shoes
confessed to me one day

Paragraph 3: we became close.

the most exciting thing was...during holidays when a parent let us invite
Actually we repeated? (what?)
had to make

Paragraph 4: remember all this time spent

soft childhood? perhaps "sweet" or "wonderful" instead?

Sra
English writing - Babouchka, Sunday, April 10, 2011 at 2:03pm
Thaank you for your help.
I have corrected.

Childhood’s twins

As a child did you ever had a favourite friend? Who was your partner whatever you did. Certainly the only one you confessed your dreams. Most of us remembered their best times with this particular person.

During my first day at school I met her. Already when I had arrived I noticed her. Actually she looked the same as I. She smiled with all her teeth and from her brown eyes. Her blonde hair was made into a ponytail with a straight fringe. She also wore a dress and shoes similar to mine. My mother confessed me one day she had thought it had been my clone.

Quickly we became close. After school if I wasn’t at her home she was at mine. Moreover we never got bored. The most exciting was during holiday when parent let us invited each other for a whole week. In fact we pretended to be singers waited by the whole world for a concert. In fact we rehearsed our show, before we had to make amazing costumes for representations.

I always remember all this time spent with her as the best part of an easy and sweet childhood.

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