Okay so you're writing about social networking aren't you?
Broaden it a bit. Basically you are talking only on how it helps you stay connected. Why don't you add in about how its changed the way we keep up with current events
NOTE: Libya and Egypt organised revolts via twitter...
Think about how you can also add in how it allows people to present a glorified version of themselves.
So how do you think you can change your thesis to reflect that?
Maybe something like
Social networking is a powerfull force in modern society. It helps us stay connected with friends, even if we don't show them the 'real' us and it has shaped current events and our views on these events.
Neither of you has written a true thesis statement. It's all factual; there's no position in either one.
Your thesis statement must include factual information plus your position/opinion/stance. Without your position on the topic, it isn't a true thesis statement. So think of this sentence as the angle you want to take on the topic and what you intend to prove by the end of your paper. (If your statement is simply factual, then there's nothing to prove!)
Read carefully and follow ALL directions.
This is one of the very best places I've seen online to help students write good thesis statements. It shows you sentences that aren't thesis statements and how to turn each one into real thesis statements.
can i get some suggestions what I should write about?