Homework Help: english

Posted by ted on Friday, February 18, 2011 at 12:36pm.

I was given an assignment to write a one paragraph essay.
I need you to pls help me with my essay on "the sniper" by liam o'flaherty.
you can tell me where i went wrong and anyother thing.
This is my essay so far:

War knows no boundaries(age, sex, location etc.). In the short story "The sniper" by Liam O'flaherty which establishes a theme of innocence to experience by the use of a Republican sniper and also establishes the realities of war. The character is seen as an evil person but his physical description emphasizes the feelings of innocence. "His face was the face of a student, thin and ascetic, but his eyes had the cold gleam of the fanatic". This quote tells us that the character could play two roles. When you look at his face, he looks young and does not look like a sniper, on the other side he is a sniper that kills people. His face look innocent but he is very experienced. "Then taking out his field dressing, he ripped open the packet with his knife. He broke the neck of the iodine bottle and let the bitter fluid drip into the wound. He placed the cotton wadding over the wound and wrapped the dressing over it. He tied the end with his teeth". This quote gives us an evidence of what the Republican sniper did after he was shot in his arm. The theme establishes the realities of war, showing us that war could led to anything e.g. death, sorrow or depression etc especially when you are more excited about it. "He was eating a sandwich hungrily. He had eaten nothing since morning. He had been to excited to eat". The quote tells us that the sniper was very excited to kill people that he even killed a woman who informed the enemy sniper, where the Republican sniper is. He fired another shot to kill the man, he was scared and was curoius to identify the man" enemy sniper" that he had killed." The cloud of fear scattered from his mind and he laughed". This qoute tells us that he was scared and was wondering if he had killed his own company. He took the risk to turn over the dead body and found out that it was his own brother.

Pls can you tell me what i could write as the conclusion because am stuck.
Then you said that For a conclusion, you should write what his reaction was when he discovered his own brother. Did his reaction fit into the innocent-looking-but-not-really-innocent angle to his personality?

But the short story did not say anything about the sniper's reaction when he saw his brother. pls help me

English - PsyDAG, Friday, February 18, 2011 at 1:09pm
War knows no boundaries (age, sex, location etc.). In the short story (COMMA) "The Sniper(COMMA)" Liam O'Flaherty establishes a theme of innocence to experience by the use of a Republican sniper and also establishes the realities of war. The character is seen as an evil person (COMMA) but his physical description emphasizes the feelings of innocence. "His face was the face of a student, thin and ascetic, but his eyes had the cold gleam of the fanatic". (PERIOD WITHIN QUOTE AND POSSIBLE PAGE REFERENCE.) This quote tells us that the character could play two roles. When you look at his face, he looks young and does not look like a sniper, on the other side he is a sniper that kills people. His face look innocent (COMMA) but he is very experienced.

(FOR EXTENDED QUOTES, USE NEW PARAGRAPH. CITE PAGE.)

"Then taking out his field dressing, he ripped open the packet with his knife. He broke the neck of the iodine bottle and let the bitter fluid drip into the wound. He placed the cotton wadding over the wound and wrapped the dressing over it. He tied the end with his teeth". (PERIOD AGAIN.)

This quote gives us an evidence of what the Republican sniper did after he was shot in his arm. The theme establishes the realities of war, showing us that war could led to anything e.g. death, sorrow or depression etc(PERIOD)(COMMA) especially when you are more excited about it.

USE NEW PARAGRAPH TO INDICATE CHANGE IN IDEAS, TIME, PLACES OR PERSONS.

"He was eating a sandwich hungrily. He had eaten nothing since morning. He had been to excited to eat". (PERIOD WITHIN QUOTE) The quote tells us that the sniper was very excited to kill people that he even killed a woman who informed the enemy sniper where the Republican sniper is ("WHERE HE WAS"?). He fired another shot to kill the man (WHAT MAN? UNCLEAR.), he was scared and was curoius to identify the man" enemy sniper" that he had killed.

" (WATCH PLACEMENT OF QUOTES.) The cloud of fear scattered from his mind and he laughed". This qoute (SP) tells us that he was scared and was wondering if he had killed his own company ("COMRADE"?). He took the risk to turn over the dead body and found out that it was his own brother.

How would you feel, if you found out that you had mistakenly shot your brother?

Caps are only used for contrast. You need to review your use of commas.

http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/commas.htm

In the future, if nobody is available to proofread your work, you can do this yourself. After writing your material, put it aside for a day — at least several hours. (This breaks mental sets you might have that keep you from noticing problems.) Then read it aloud as if you were reading someone else's work. (Reading aloud slows down your reading, so you are less likely to skip over problems.)

If your reading goes smoothly, that is fine. However, wherever you "stumble" in your reading, other persons are likely to have a problem in reading your material. Those "stumbles" indicate areas that need revising.

Another option, if it is available on your computer, is to have the computer read it to you.

Also, make use of "Spelling and Grammar" under "Tools" in your word processing program.

Once you have made your revisions, repeat the process above. Good papers often require many drafts.

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