Please check for any errors and correct them for me.
Enclosed is the information you requested concerning our float trips down the Colorado River in the Grand Canyon. All departure dates and prices for the various trips are listed in our booklet. At this time the trips leaving on July 10, July 12, August 2, and August 9 are full.
Minor children below the age of nine may not participate in the float trips. Minor children between the ages of nine and 16 may participate in the float trips, if they are accomplished by a parent.
If you have any other questions after you have read the enclosed booklet, please let me know. We look forward to hosting your voyage through the magnificent Grand Canyon.
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Enclosed is the information you requested concerning our float trips down the Colorado River in the Grand Canyon. All departure dates and prices for the various trips are listed in our booklet. At this time, please note that the trips leaving on July 10, July 12, August 2, and August 9 are already full.
There is also an important requirement for the participation of minor children in these float trips. Children below the age of nine are not allowed to participate. However, children between the ages of nine and 16 can join the float trips, but only if they are accompanied by a parent.
To get a better understanding of the available dates and prices, please refer to the enclosed booklet. If you have any further questions or inquiries after reading the booklet, please feel free to let me know. We are excited to have the opportunity to host your voyage through the magnificent Grand Canyon.