Posted by Justin on Tuesday, February 8, 2011 at 8:58pm.
Is my first paragraph of the essay good? Correct some mistakes.
The Lightning Thief book and movie are different and same in many ways. The book of the Lightning Thief is more interesting and detailed for most people who read the book and watched the movie. The movie sometimes has things that the book doesn’t have and sometimes the book has things that the movie doesn’t have, however, there are some things that are also the same. In the book and the movie of the Lightning Thief, Percy Jackson, son of the Greek god, Poseidon, is on his way to find back Zeus’ stolen lightning bolt, and the thief who stole it. Percy has finally returned the stolen lightning bolt and found who had stole it, it was Luke!
- Language Arts - Writeacher, Tuesday, February 8, 2011 at 9:04pm
This single paragraph is very mixed up and difficult to read.
Whenever you are writing a comparison/contrast paper (paragraph, essay, research paper), you need to plan it out very carefully on paper first.
1. Write all the information about one of your topics on one page.
2. Write all the information about the other topic on another page.
3. Then put them together in this order:
2. All about topic A
~~~2A. detail 1
~~~2B. detail 2
~~~2C. detail 3
~~~2D. detail 4
~~~2E. detail 5
3. All about topic B
~~~3A. detail 1
~~~3B. detail 2
~~~3C. detail 3
~~~3D. detail 4
~~~3E. detail 5
The number of details for each topic will vary depending on your main points. I would include comparisons (how they are similar) in the introduction and conclusion, but sections 2 and 3 and all those details will be stating and explaining how they are different.
There are two recognized patterns for writing comparison/contrast papers. One is casually referred to as "zig-zag,” but can be very confusing for the reader if you don’t use transitions effectively. The other is topic-by-topic (which is what I've outlined above) and is much easier for the reader to follow.
See http://leo.stcloudstate.edu/acadwrite/comparcontrast.html for further help with comparison/contrast writing.
Once you have organized your information, please re-post if you’d like feedback from someone here.
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