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The 20 errors are in the following categories: comma usage (six errors); question marks, apostrophes, and quotation marks (five errors); capitalization (six errors); and colons, semi-colons, and commonly misused words (three errors).

Passage:

Why are great numbers of students choosing to pursue their college degrees using their home computers. Benjamin Franklin said; A penny saved is a penny earned”. This principle applies to the american and foreign online student. Todays students choose to take online courses to save money on transportation, books, babysitters and supplies.

The fluctuating cost of gasoline in the united states is one reason online courses appeal to axia college students. They would rather cushion there financial nest eggs than to spend money on replacing worn tires or risking icy road conditions.

Students also realize that a traditional college requires them to purchase numerous books however, online courses provide the majority of their course materials within the virtual classroom. A student may save hundreds of dollars on textbooks during one block of courses.

Additionally online courses are convenient for parents and caregivers. College students who are responsible for children or aging parents must rely on outside help. An online student is able to avoid the high costs of hiring people to take care of their loved ones.

Lastly, an online student does not have to purchase supplies. Pencils, pens, paper, erasers, backpacks staplers, and paper clips are all needed in traditional courses. The online student needs only one tool to complete their college degree; a home computer. A computer is an online students conduit to class and to all the materials he or she needs.

Franklin D. roosevelt exclaimed that, “Happiness is not the mere possession of money.” He wanted Americans to understand that the joy of achievement is the path to happiness. Yet, even President Roosevelt would agree that earning an online college degree is a financially wise decision.

  • com/155 - , Saturday, January 22, 2011 at 7:19pm

    Oooops! You forgot to tell us what YOU THINK the 20 errors are.

  • com/155 - , Saturday, January 22, 2011 at 7:24pm

    Sorry, I posted the master by mistake.

  • com/155 - , Saturday, January 22, 2011 at 7:59pm

    Here's a strategy for you: Take each category of errors and go through the paragraphs looking only for one at a time.

    ~~comma usage (six errors);

    ~~question marks, apostrophes, and quotation marks (five errors);

    ~~capitalization (six errors);

    ~~and colons, semi-colons, and commonly misused words (three errors).

    Look up different topics here:
    http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/index2.htm

  • com/155 - , Saturday, January 22, 2011 at 8:12pm

    I think I found them all. What do you think?

    Passage:

    Why are great numbers of students choosing to pursue their college degrees using their home computers.(computers?) Benjamin Franklin said; A (“A)penny saved is a penny earned”. This principle applies to the american (American) and foreign (Foreign) online student. Todays (Today’s) students choose to take online courses to save money on transportation, books, babysitters (babysitters,) and supplies.

    The fluctuating cost of gasoline in the united states (United States) is one reason online courses appeal to axia college (Axia College) students. They would rather cushion there(their) financial nest eggs than to spend money on replacing worn tires(tires,)or risking icy road conditions.

    Students also realize that a traditional college requires them to purchase numerous books (books.) however(However), online courses provide the majority of their course materials (material) within the virtual classroom. A student may save hundreds of dollars on textbooks during one block of courses.

    Additionally(Additionally,) online courses are convenient for parents and caregivers. College students who are responsible for children or aging parents must rely on outside help. An online student is able to avoid the high costs of hiring people to take care of their loved ones.

    Lastly, an online student does not have to purchase supplies. Pencils, pens, paper, erasers, backpacks(backpacks,) staplers, and paper clips are all needed in traditional courses. The online student needs only one tool to complete their college degree; a home computer. A computer is an online students conduit to class (class,) and to all the materials (material) he or she needs.

    Franklin D. roosevelt (Roosevelt) exclaimed that, “Happiness is not the mere possession of money.” He wanted Americans to understand that the joy of achievement is the path to happiness. Yet, even President Roosevelt would agree that earning an online college degree is a financially wise decision.

  • com/155 - , Saturday, January 22, 2011 at 8:30pm

    Additional errors:
    --Franklin said;
    --earned”.
    --An online student is able to avoid the high costs of hiring people to take care of their loved ones. (pronoun/antecedent)
    --The online student needs only one tool to complete their college degree; a home computer. (two errors in here)
    --an online students conduit
    --Yet, even


    Not errors:
    --foreign (Foreign)
    --worn tires(tires,)or
    --materials (material) -- in two places
    --to class (class,)


    Another possibility:
    --books; however,

  • com/155 - , Saturday, January 22, 2011 at 9:24pm

    Thank you so much for your feedback. I think I have everything fixed. What do you think?


    Why are great numbers of students choosing to pursue their college degrees using their home computers.(computers?) Benjamin Franklin said; A (“A)penny saved is a penny earned”. (earned.”) This principle applies to the american (American) and foreign online student. Todays (Today’s) students choose to take online courses to save money on transportation, books, babysitters (babysitters,) and supplies.

    The fluctuating cost of gasoline in the united states (United States) is one reason online courses appeal to axia college (Axia College) students. They would rather cushion there(their) financial nest eggs than to spend money on replacing worn tires or risking icy road conditions.

    Students also realize that a traditional college requires them to purchase numerous books (books;) however(However), online courses provide the majority of their course materials within the virtual classroom. A student may save hundreds of dollars on textbooks during one block of courses.

    Additionally(Additionally,) online courses are convenient for parents and caregivers. College students who are responsible for children or aging parents must rely on outside help. An online student is able to avoid the high costs of hiring people to take care of their loved ones. (one’s)

    Lastly, an online student does not have to purchase supplies. Pencils, pens, paper, erasers, backpacks(backpacks,) staplers, and paper clips are all needed in traditional courses. The online student needs only one tool to complete their college (College) degree; (degree,) a home computer. A computer is an online students(student’s) conduit to class and to all the materials he or she needs.

    Franklin D. roosevelt (Roosevelt) exclaimed that, “Happiness is not the mere possession of money.” He wanted Americans to understand that the joy of achievement is the path to happiness. Yet, (Yet;) even President Roosevelt would agree that earning an online college degree is a financially wise decision.

  • com/155 - , Saturday, January 22, 2011 at 9:42pm

    --Franklin said; comma after "said" not a semicolon

    --An online student is able to avoid the high costs of hiring people to take care of his or her loved ones. http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/595/01/ <~~Read section 1. Also "ones" is correct; it's not possessive, so doesn't need an apostrophe.

    --books; however, no capital after a semicolon unless it's a proper noun, and "however" is not a proper noun!

    --The online student needs only one tool to complete their college degree; a home computer. Two errors in here. One is like the "student ... their" error above, and there should be a colon (:) after "degree."

    --Yet, even no punctuation needed after "Yet"

  • com/155 - , Saturday, January 22, 2011 at 10:14pm

    ok....everything should be good now. Hopefully, you will agree.


    Why are great numbers of students choosing to pursue their college degrees using their home computers.(computers?) Benjamin Franklin said;(said,) A (“A)penny saved is a penny earned”. (earned.”) This principle applies to the american (American) and foreign online student. Todays (Today’s) students choose to take online courses to save money on transportation, books, babysitters (babysitters,) and supplies.

    The fluctuating cost of gasoline in the united states (United States) is one reason online courses appeal to axia college (Axia College) students. They would rather cushion there(their) financial nest eggs than to spend money on replacing worn tires or risking icy road conditions.

    Students also realize that a traditional college requires them to purchase numerous books (books;) however, online courses provide the majority of their course materials within the virtual classroom. A student may save hundreds of dollars on textbooks during one block of courses.

    Additionally(Additionally,) online courses are convenient for parents and caregivers. College students who are responsible for children or aging parents must rely on outside help. An online student is able to avoid the high costs of hiring people to take care of their (his or her) loved ones.

    Lastly, an online student does not have to purchase supplies. Pencils, pens, paper, erasers, backpacks(backpacks,) staplers, and paper clips are all needed in traditional courses. The online student needs only one tool to complete their (his or her) college (College) degree; (degree:) a home computer. A computer is an online students(student’s) conduit to class and to all the materials he or she needs.

    Franklin D. roosevelt (Roosevelt) exclaimed that, “Happiness is not the mere possession of money.” He wanted Americans to understand that the joy of achievement is the path to happiness. Yet even President Roosevelt would agree that earning an online college degree is a financially wise decision.

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