posted by Kayla on .
I need help putting my thesis into "parallel grammatical structure".
Children should be limited on the amount of television they watch because not only is it filled with bad influences but it causes them behavior problems, and ultimately puts their health at risk.
What is another way I can write this??
Parents should limit the amount of time their children spend watching television. Not only are many programs on television filled with negative influences, which can be the cause of bad behavior, but watching too much television ultimately puts children's health at risk.
(These are pretty broad claims. I hope you will be following up with very specific examples to prove the point you're making. I don't think you're wrong; I do think you need to back up your ideas with lots of examples and details.)