Posted by Keisha on Monday, November 22, 2010 at 5:25pm.
Frederick Douglass had rough transition from freedom to slavery. His journey changed from oppression to freedom. He did not know what God had planned for his life, but he soon realized that his life was greater than slavery. I will be discussing the importance of trust, howrisky it was for him to escape, and how trust took part in moving forward toward true freedom. <~~How can you rephrase this last sentence so you don't sound like someone in 3rd grade?!
http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/intros.htm <~~Read and study this webpage carefully.
Trust was a major issue back in those times. Escaping from slavery could cost slaves their lives. If Frederick Douglass was going to escape slavery he needed someone that he could trust and fast. Slaves only knew the life of being a slave. They did not know how to escape from their masters without being caught. He had to find out how to escape from a slave named Jake. “Jake told me all about his circumstances, and how narrowly he escaped being taken back to slavery;” So he could trust Jake to a certain extent. How will you correct the problems in the underlined section?
Frederick Douglass could not trust anyone. “That the black people in New York were not to be trusted; that there were hired men on the lookout for fugitives from slavery, and who, for a few dollars, would betray me into the hands of the slave-catchers;”<~~Why are you putting semicolons at the end of quotations? Why are the quotations not being cited? It was very sad that he could not trust his own people and that they would rat him out<~~How can you say this without using slang? for money. He could only rely on himself. So he could not risk being recaptured by his slave master and punished for escaping. Do not start sentences with any of the coordinating conjunctions (and, or ... so). This has occurred in more than one place in this paper. Find and fix them all.
He was not safe in New York and they<~~Who are "they"? had just passed a fugitive slave bill. space needed here “New York, seventeen years ago, was less a place of safety for a runaway slave than now, and all know how unsafe it now is, under the new fugitive slave bill.” Citation and space needed here. Frederick was scared and lonely, and he did not have any money. space needed here He finally met some new friends, the Johnsons. “Once initiated into the new life of freedom, and assured by Mr. Johnson that New Bedford was a safe place.” <~~That is not a sentence. Also citation and a space are needed here Frederick was secure<~~comma needed here and he could finally start a new life. His newfound trust made freedom a breath of fresh air for him.
In conclusion, trust was very important to Frederick Douglass. His escape was very risky, and he had to trust someone in order to be truly free. Frederick had a long journey as a slave, but a beautiful victory as a free man.
Do you understand the need for citation and how to include it correctly?
You need to have each source of information cited in TWO places:
1. the Works Cited page that is placed after the last page of your paper, and
2. in parentheses in the text of your paper, immediately after the quotation or paraphrase.
For example, this would go on the Works Cited page (with proper indentation for the second and following lines):
Du Bois, W.E.B. The Souls of Black Folk. Chicago, 1903. Project Bartleby. Ed. Steven van Leeuwen. Dec. 1995. Columbia U. 2 Dec. 2003
<www.cc.columbia.edu/acis/bartleby/dubois/>.
... and this would go immediately after the quotation or whatever:
(Du Bois)
The information in parentheses in the text needs to be as brief as possible. That's why there's a Works Cited page – for all the details of the listing.
~~~~~~~~~~~
Here's a good place for information on citing in MLA format:
http://www.ccc.commnet.edu/mla/index.shtml
Hold your cursor over the words CITING SOURCES in the left column and then click on whatever type of source you need help with. Many examples will show up. You will get two examples for each type of reference – one for the Works Cited page and one for the parenthetical (in-text) citation.
You can also see what a Works Cited page looks like – click on Sample Works Cited in the left column.
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