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Why are many students choosing to pursue their college degrees using their home computers. (QUESTION MARK) Benjamin Franklin said; (COMMA, QUOTE MARKS) A penny saved is a penny earned.” This principle applies to ("BOTH") american (CAPS) and foreign online student(S). Today students choose to take online courses to save money on transportation, books, babysitters and supplies.
The fluctuating cost of gasoline in the united states (CAPS) is one reason online courses appeal to university of phoenix (CAPS) students. They would rather cushion there (SP) financial nest eggs than spend money on replacing worn tires or risk icy road conditions. (ICY ROADS IN PHOENIX?)
Students also realize that a traditional college requires them to purchase numerous book’s; (NOT POSSESSIVE, PERIOD, NEW SENTENCE) online courses, on the other hand, provide the majority of their course materials within the virtual classroom. A student might save hundreds of dollars on textbooks during one block of courses.
Additionally (COMMA) online courses are convenient for parents and caregivers. College students who are responsible for children or aging parents must rely on outside help. Online students are able to avoid the high costs of hiring people to take care of their loved ones. (IF AT HOME, CHILDREN OR AGING PARENTS ARE OFTEN A GREAT DISTRACTION FROM STUDYING.)
Last, an online student does not have to purchase supplies. Pencils, pens, paper, erasers, backpacks staplers, and paper clips are all needed in traditional courses. The online student needs only one tool to complete a college degree; a home computer. A computer is an online student's conduit to class and to all the materials he or she needs.
Franklin D. roosevelt (CAP) exclaimed, “Happiness is not the mere possession of money.” He wanted Americans to understand that the joy of achievement is the ("THE" INFERS IT IS THE ONLY PATH, WHILE "A" INDICATES OTHERS ARE AVAILABLE.) path to happiness. Even President Roosevelt would agree, though, that earning an online college degree is a financially wise decision (PERIOD)
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In the future, if nobody is available to proofread your work, you can do this yourself. After writing your material, put it aside for a day — at least several hours. (This breaks mental sets you might have that keep you from noticing problems.) Then read it aloud as if you were reading someone else's work. (Reading aloud slows down your reading, so you are less likely to skip over problems.)
If your reading goes smoothly, that is fine. However, wherever you "stumble" in your reading, other persons are likely to have a problem in reading your material. Those "stumbles" indicate areas that need revising.
Another option, if it is available on your computer, is to have the computer read it to you.
Also, make use of "Spelling and Grammar" under "Tools" in your word processing program.
Once you have made your revisions, repeat the process above. Good papers often require many drafts.