I have several questions for you:
1. What is your assignment? That is, what type of paper are you supposed to be writing?
2. What is your thesis statement?
3. Do you have a plan or outline, written up before you started your rough draft?
Let us know.
It's a response paper to Hoagland's City Rat. I don't have a thesis or outline. I'm better at writing up a paper and then putting in a thesis and organizing it. I'm not even sure how well I understand the story, so if there are things that I didn't get, can you please let me know?
I am reminded of going hunting years ago, the gent I took was shooting wildly, one bullet flew over me. In a rage, I confronted him...angrily...asked him wth....he stated that he was better shooting than aiming.
Your writing is without aim, whether you agree or not. It just seems to have no thread, or purpose. Yes, you dont have a thesis (a central bullseye) nor an outline (a plan to hit the bullseye).
In critical reading, one looks for the central theme as a purpose of the story. One takes notes on that, writing in margins, or in notebooks. What was the theme, what was the thread that wove it together? A plot within a setting usually does this. The output of a critical analysis is a "thesis".
Your acknowledgment of not understanding the story fits here, and in my experience, not getting things, means you are not seeing the target.
My experience with teaching reading to college prep students tells me that you could benefit from honest application of the skills introduced here:
I hope you give it a try, but my experience tells me that you won't.
Surely your professor gave more guidance than the simple word "response." Is it to be one paragraph, a 3-paragraph paper, a 5-paragraph paper. No matter HOW you plan the paper and planning/organizing is a large part of success in writing, you WILL need a thesis statement, an introduction, the "proof" of your thesis statement and a conclusion.
If you don't know how to do these things, it's simply time to learn!
Try some of the following links on how to write a good thesis statement:
Try here for a good introduction:
Here for how to write a good conclusion:
College professors assume you have had a decent high school English class to train you. My student's minimum was a 5-paragraph essay (AP & IB) so here are some guidelines:
Sra (aka Mme)
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