posted by Renee on .
Three years ago, Two of the smarter girls in my class had there fat brother intentionally rob me. Accidentally, I hit the robber with my purse. Than I ran quickly around the corner. The fat robber could not find me. Finally, the fat robber ran after me but he went the opposite way. I screamed loudly asking for help. So happy to know It's almost over. The cute policeman never caught the fat robber but I knew his sisters. That day was the worst day ever.
OK, what adjectives, adverbs, and pronouns do you find in here?
Note: Be careful of this type of error: "there" when it should be "their" and others like this.
Also watch where you do and don't put capital letters.
Three years ago, Two (NO CAPS) of the smarter girls in my class had there ("THEIR") fat brother intentionally (DELETE. ROBBERY IS ALWAYS INTENTIONAL.) rob me. Accidentally, I hit the robber with my purse. (WAS IT AN ACCIDENT?) Than ("THEN") I ran quickly around the corner. The fat robber ("HE") could not find me. Finally, the fat robber ("HE") ran after me (COMMA) but he went the opposite way. I screamed loudly asking (DELETE "ASKING") for help. ("I AM") So happy to know It's almost over. The cute policeman never caught the fat robber (COMMA) but I knew his sisters. (WAS HE EVER CAUGHT?) That day was the worst day ever.
Caps are for contrast only. Review your use of commas.
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Pronouns: girls,robber,and I adjectives: smarter,big,fat, and happy adverbs: intentionally, accidentally, quickly, Finally and loudly. Little confuse on there
girls and robber = nouns
Please go back over those lists of pronouns.
opposite = adjective (there are additional adjectives in there)
almost = adverb (there may be others)
Yes, the police got the brother and the two sister
You're very welcome. Keep working on these things.