posted by purple on .
I have to write a personal statement and I have a very unintelligent question.
I'm trying to start off my statement with this "anecdote-ish" type thing.
Is the below paragraph formated properly:
Rawr! "There are monsters in my closet!" I screamed. And as I walked over to the closet and checked there was...nothing.
I'm asking this because there are quite a few rules of dialouge that can be confusing.
I like this. What is it that you find confusing?
It's confusing because I don't know whether to separate the interjection "Rawr" from what I am saying. Also, I'd like to know if it is grammatically correct to put extra information ('And as I walked over to the closet and checked there was...nothing.') behind a quote.
Who/What is saying "Rawr"?
Technically, the ellipsis (...) is used to indicate that there are missing words, but you are using it to emphasize the word "nothing" after it, and to imitate speech if someone were to read/say this aloud, right? The only change I'd make is to put a space before and a space after the ellipsis.
When you're setting up something like this at the beginning of an essay, just about all teachers I know would give you license for this section -- as long as the rest of your paper is correct in grammar and usage.
You're welcome! Go get an A!!