Posted by Sally on Saturday, October 9, 2010 at 4:54pm.
I'd do the following:
-- replace "He" with "Hawthorne"
-- clarify "the idea" and "it" (in all places)
-- replace "like" with "as if"
Once you make these corrections, please repost, and then someone here will be able to tell you more.
ok thanks
New Thesis:
Hawthorne stressed the sin by stretching the idea of sin and making the letter A seem as if it is a mystical character itself, and allowing the letter(sounds a little weird, should I put "sin" instead?) to be able to physically harm and hinder the other main characters in the book.
How's this:
Hawthorne stressed the sin by stretching the idea of sin, making the letter A seem as if it is a mystical character itself, and allowing the letter to be able to physically harm and hinder the other main characters in the book.
I made your series parallel ("by stretching... making ... allowing..."), but other than that it needs no other corrections.
I think it's a good thesis and should lead to a good, interesting paper.
ok thanks:)it great
YW!!
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